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Why Did I Love You?... [August contest]
I'll never forget the why of why I loved you
You took me places I'd never been before
And brought me many admiring glances
Whenever we appeared together
I was entranced by your low, throaty voice
We moved together so well
I felt like a king astride your beautiful body
I felt like I could fly
Yes, there were bumps in the road
When we broke down and had our differences
I cried like a baby, with frustration
“Let's please start again?”
When you refused to go any further
I had to find my own way home
You always got a ride
Sometimes I walked
Now we are at the end, I can't go on
It's been a hell of a ride...
I hope you find someone new
About This Poem
Review Request Direction: How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
Geezer
6 years 10 months ago
Thank you Katie...
I think you will be surprised at the basis of this story. I will give it when the contest ends. ~ Gee.
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lovedly
6 years 11 months ago
sad experience it often does happen
unrequited love they all say
look at the title
correct you may
else a techy foul may be
Geezer
6 years 10 months ago
Thank you lovedly...
I don't mind losing to someone that has better work, but I'd hate to go down for a technical foul!
~ Geezer.
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raj
6 years 10 months ago
Hi Geezer
the two ends of a relationship ...how it started and reason it ended...neatly captured in these lines...
as mentioned by Lovedly you need to change the title to Why Did I Love You which is specifically stated by Stan as a contest requirement.
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Geezer
6 years 10 months ago
Thank you too, raj...
As I said to lovedly, I don't want to lose over a tech problem. ~ Geezer.
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