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Jul 26, 2024
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Why,why,why?
Why does your loss
Feel.this
Visceral,
After!
All!
This!
Time!
Let me go.
Leave me be.
Die.
Once.
Not every day.
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
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neopoet
11 months 2 weeks ago
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Rula
11 months 2 weeks ago
Kow
Few words that reflect too much anguish. I can feel the pain.
I thought you may be don't need the period after "be"
I read it like one statement
"Let me go.
Leave me be
Die
Once."
"Visceral " a typo that needs your attention.
Thank you for sharing.
kowque
11 months 2 weeks ago
Thank you
The typos are an occupational hazard of using English...when it's literally a third language
I'll fix it.
Thank you for leaving a comment
kowque
11 months 2 weeks ago
Forgot to add
#MuchLove
Lavender
11 months 1 week ago
Why?
Oh, Koki,
This is felt deep in the gut. Nicely done.
Thank you,
L
kowque
11 months 1 week ago
My purple flower
Thank you