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Apr 10, 2025
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windswept smiles
long, top-down drives
even shirtless-tans
sweet strawberry-kisses and
glorious watermelon stains
laughter lifting through the trees
glimpses of sun-blest promises
sugar-coated whispers
catching in the breeze
fruit bowls, waterholes
and refreshing icy poles
interlacing fingers share
starry nights and lazy days
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
neopoet
3 months ago
Neopoet AI - version 2.0
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "windswept smiles" captures a sense of carefree joy and nostalgia through vivid imagery and sensory details. The use of specific elements like "shirtless-tans," "strawberry-kisses," and "watermelon stains" creates a tangible atmosphere of summer warmth and leisure. The repetition of alliteration in phrases like "sugar-coated whispers" adds a musical quality to the poem. Additionally, the contrast between the energetic activities described, such as "interlacing fingers" and "refreshing icy poles," with the peaceful moments of "starry nights and lazy days" creates a dynamic rhythm throughout the piece. Consider exploring further variations in pacing and structure to enhance the overall flow of the poem and deepen the emotional impact of the memories being portrayed.
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Frederick Kesner
3 months ago
Hope so, can’t hardly wait to
Frederick Kesner
3 months ago
Hope so, can’t hardly wait to
Hope so, can’t hardly wait to interact with npai
Frederick Kesner
3 months ago
edited version 1
Long, top-down drives—
wind threading through tangled hair,
shirtless-tans baked golden,
arms stretched into a sunlit sky.
Sweet strawberry-kisses linger,
juice dripping from fingertips,
glorious watermelon stains
sprawled across lazy laughter.
Laughter spirals, lifting through trees,
woven with glimpses of sun-blest promises.
Sugar-coated whispers scatter,
catching on the breeze like unspoken secrets.
Fruit bowls gleam with vibrant hues,
waterholes shimmer like liquid crystal,
refreshing icy poles melting too fast
in summer’s relentless glow.
Fingers interlace—
gripping the weightlessness of starry nights,
the drowsy embrace of lazy days,
moments expanding, time slipping.
Candlewitch
3 months ago
I love this...
breezy poem! my favorite lines were to to choose:
interlacing fingers share
starry nights and lazy days
fondly, Cat
Frederick Kesner
3 months ago
So glad that this was enjoyed
So glad that this was enjoyed! It’s a little fun piece that was a pleasure to write and share. Thank you so much, Cat.
Geezer
3 months ago
I wasn't aware...
that you were there. Did you get pictures? I bet I'm in half of them. Damn, what a summer that was!
"Summer of Love" Woodstock, bells and braless women! I was in for the ride from the start, you couldn't have pushed me out of that Volkswagen van if I was hogtied. You took me there. ~ Geez.
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Frederick Kesner
3 months ago
Now that’s a compliment’s
Now that’s a compliment’s compliment… woulda been if I wasn’t ensconced half way around the globe! Glad to have sparked the flame of past and true events :-)