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Rosewood Apothecary
Rosewood Apothecary
Feb 28, 2023 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Winter’s Gait

Driving wind screaming
February holds the reigns
Frozen unshod hooves

Gallop for the rains
Atop the hardened frost line
Below pounding trot

A sleeping world waits
Root and spore begin to plot
Winter changes gait

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Eastern

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: U.S.A., USA

Favorite Poets: Emily Dickinson, Robert Frost, Walt Whitman. I’m enamored by the work of lyricists such as Robert Hunter, John Barlow, John Dyer Baizley, and Tom Marshall just to name a handful.

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Comments

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

2 years 4 months ago

hello Tim,

this is a very good detailed poem depicting Winter, one of the best I have ever read!

*hugs & love, Cat

Geezer

Geezer

2 years 4 months ago

Yes...

I feel like Winter has changed its gait, hoping to throw us off. [the thought did occur to me, like bucking you off].
February does hold the [reins]. Not feeling so alone in that, I see. ~ Geez.
.

RoseBlack

RoseBlack

2 years 4 months ago

February

Has outstayed its welcome. I love the images of it guiding horses through its many different personalities. Well done!

Rosewood Apothecary

Rosewood Apothecary

2 years 4 months ago

Thank you all

This is a few weeks old and I’ve been saving it. The stanzas are essentially haiku. However there is a rhyme pattern that follows western poetry patterns. Reigns/Rains, trot/plot, waits/gait.

I was making it up. I don’t think it’s a thing this hybrid style.

Lavender

Lavender

2 years 4 months ago

Winter's Gait

Hi, Tim,
I like the idea of using the three haiku together to form a longer poem. I especially like the way the poem transitions naturally the way a single haiku does - the first two stanzas defining the natural subject, and the last offering contrast. "A sleeping world waits." Peaceful and calm.
Thank you!
L

Seren

Seren

2 years 4 months ago

Dear Tim

You just explained what I noticed. The Haiku and the rhyme hidden in amongst it. I've never known such a winter, such as you all experience. Except through the written word. Which this conveys.

Well done

Jayne