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Dec 12, 2012
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Winter on The Prairie
Sometimes,
on the frozen edges of old night,
I sit upon the back-door steps,
flakes of snow still wandering through
the yellow glow of back-porch light,
and in the frost-breathed dark,
dusted by a swath of watchful stars
crowding close around the house,
I hear winter's whispering wind
through the leafless snowbound oaks,
and it brings back memories of the sea
a thousand miles of lifetime away.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: This is an attempt to re-write the only poem I didn't save from the old site.
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Not actively editing
Comments
sueb
12 years 7 months ago
I was there with you closed
I was there with you closed my eyes and imagined myself on the steps lovely poem x
Race_9togo
12 years 7 months ago
Thanks Sue
Glad that you enjoyed sitting with me!
Rula
12 years 7 months ago
very vividly
captured jim
Nothing to critique
Race_9togo
12 years 7 months ago
Hi Rula,
Thank you for your enjoyment!
weirdelf
12 years 7 months ago
A most potent juxtaposition
But I guess I had to be there.
Maybe not. The smell of cheap teacher's tea, cigarettes, books and teacher sweat still invokes my first love. We were both often standing outside the teachers staffroom for... well, in modern terms "sexually inappropriate behaviour". We were 10. [grins]
Race_9togo
12 years 7 months ago
LOL
Thanks Jess.
scribbler
12 years 7 months ago
Hi Jim
You capture it all perfectly..............wish I lived where one could see stars while it snowed....................stan
Race_9togo
12 years 7 months ago
LOL Hi Stan
Where I live we have lake effect snow, where the warm moist air from Lake Michigan gets pushed inland, and the sudden drop in temperature makes it snow like hell. One minute there's complete cloud cover and blizzard conditions,then in the next, when the wind shifts, you can see the stars. We often get conditions where the snow is blowing in from the North, but the sky above is clear.
If you're on the street you can actually see it, a curtain of white that moves back and forth across the dark street; one side clear, the other a whiteout.
Glad you liked this one.
scribbler
12 years 7 months ago
Hi
Should have known better than to think it was a mistake lol. I reckon if a type of weather is possible it exists Somewhere..................stan
Seren
12 years 7 months ago
Dear Jim
You took me there sitting on the back doorstep, something I do quite often here ... I would love to sit in the winter and feel the atmosphere you describe so well :)
nicely done bravo
with love JC