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Heather Perry
Feb 10, 2023 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)
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Wishes, Hopes, And Dreams

Wishes are for everyone
so are hopes and dreams.

My hopes were took long ago
at least I still have dreams.

Dreams, unlike wishes
which you have to look upon a star
or count the bundle on your cake
then blow real hard.

Wishes are forever
dreams they come and go
hopes they are the rarest kind
like spring time in the snow.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

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Rosewood Apothecary

Rosewood Apothecary

2 years 5 months ago

Hi Heather

One suggestion I have is the addition of a single comma.

Wishes are for everyone
so are hopes and dreams.

My hopes were took long ago
at least I still have dreams.

Dreams, unlike wishes
which you have to look upon a star
or count the bundle on your cake
then blow real hard.

Wishes are forever
dreams they come and go
hopes they are the rarest kind
like spring time in the snow.