RoseBlack

Jan 25, 2023 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Wolf Moon

Beneath the moon
The foreboding moon
Raven tress and bare skinned
She came...

The beast within him
Raged with anticipation
As he sunk his teeth
Into her nape

Blood oozing from her wounds
Sanguine stains across her breasts
Gently he brushes a claw
Against her vapid cheeks

Now it was only a matter of time
Before their species intertwined
A gutteral howl rose from deep inside
She was now part of his blood

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: United States

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, Jim Morrison

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Comments

Seren

2 years 5 months ago

Dear Carrie

Now the lights come on and someone's home lol I can still feel you in your words. But you've come a long way. This is an awesome poem
I don't know why but I thought of Wolf Queen for the title. He's after all chosing

Or Coronation of Wolves

I can't see anything I'd change other than the title maybe. But it's always just a suggestion

Love Always J xxx

RoseBlack

2 years 5 months ago

Hi Jayne

Wolf Moon popped into my head before I even wrote any other words...I'm dabbling with dark and tastefully erotic. Glad you enjoyed.

Seren

2 years 5 months ago

Carrie

You pulled it off. It's both tasteful and erotic.

Hugs xx

RoseBlack

2 years 5 months ago

Hi Kat

I will definitely check it out...and look for more in the Necrotica series...there may be a sequel to this....

RoseBlack

2 years 5 months ago

Hi mark

Thank you for the suggestion. I will go back and look at that last stanza again.

Rosewood Apothecary

2 years 5 months ago

Lycanthrope

Very specific. Cool read. I’m not great at that genre so it’s both foreign and refreshing. The primal aspect of it is subdued with romantic subterfuge and that gives it a nice balance. Allows readers to access the darkness by illuminating it. Maybe it was the full moon. Now as I’m typing this I’m seeing this as scene in a grand play. Maybe I could draw it. I don’t know, but I liked it.

Tim

RoseBlack

2 years 5 months ago

That would be

Awesome if you could draw it. I had images in my head as I wrote it. More to come in this genre...

Candlewitch

2 years 5 months ago

hello Carrie,

the last line does feel a little rough. but I bet if you sleep on it you will figure it out. it s a gorgeous poem, please don't mess with it too much! you wouldn't believe the visuals you conjured up for my hungry mind to feast upon. thank you!

*ever, eddy
*hugs, Cat