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Christopher Stuart
Christopher Stuart
Apr 06, 2022 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

WOMAN.

Be kind to woman
that we never leave
from the cradle
to the grave
will lay us down
to sleep
because of her
we breathe.

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Not actively editing

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Region, Country: Australia, AUS

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Geezer

Geezer

3 years 2 months ago

I like the premise...

but there seems to be a break in the middle
that no matter how I read it, it does not seem that there is a way
to make the transition from the line; "the cradle to the grave" to
"will lay us down to sleep". I'm sure that you had something in mind,
but it has been lost. ~ Geezer.
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