Neopopem Of The Week July 24 through July 30th 2022

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Woman in the Pane

The woman in the window glared at its glass,
These hallowed panes with fittings of brass
Have kept her captured, gaunt, and frail,
Smothering her boring, vehement wail.

Stripped are her trinkets, trifles, appeal,
Prized possessions in glaring masses.
These panes suppress all that is real
Concealed and maintained, composed for classes.

The woman in the window finally escaped:
Brimming, then spilling, ovately shaped.
Making her entrance, she greedily sped
No one was there; she lamented with dread.

The pains of the window, now reinforced,
Would strain to blockade her torrential course.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Country/Region: New Jersey

Comments

Candlewitch

2 years 11 months ago

hello Zachary,

welcome to Neopoet! it is very nice to meet you. I see this is your very first poem you have posted on this site. if you have any questions about Neopoet, just ask any Advocate and they should be able to help you.

always, Cat

Jackweb

2 years 11 months ago

Welcome aboard !

Neopoet is a good place to be. Stay here and keep sharing your beautiful poetry. We have literary luminaries who are poised to help.
.

Rosewood Apothecary

2 years 11 months ago

You write incredibly well for a Sophomore

Fantastic job young man. I started writing poetry my junior year. Had a really special English teacher who noticed my interest and ability gave me a little nudge and trusted fate to do the rest.

This is really impressive writing. Great images. Amazing vocabulary. I cannot wait for more.

Welcome,
Tim