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Jun 19, 2025
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Words
My words are always on the page
or streamed online.
They are written down.
They are read,
and mostly inside my head.
But lately,
I have wanted to hear these words,
spoken from my mouth,
and heard.
I want those thoughts
to be engaged
in a two way conversation.
I want those words
to be used
to develop more solutions
to my daily challenges.
I want them
to have a useful purpose
in my life.
I want them
to create innovative
and proactive strategies.
I have the ability
to speak,
to advocate
for myself.
I want to be
on the front foot,
leading the charge.
It is up to me
to be that person.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Finally, I found the strength of purpose to hear my voice out loud.It is about time that it happened.
Review Request Direction:
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
neopoet
3 months 1 week ago
Neopoet AI [2025-04]
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet’s AI:
This poem explores the transition from internalized, written expression to spoken, interactive communication, highlighting a desire for words to have tangible impact. The progression from passive presence ("always on the page") to active engagement ("leading the charge") is clear and purposeful, creating a narrative arc that grounds the poem’s theme.
The poem’s strength lies in its straightforward language and structure, which mirror the speaker’s earnest and deliberate intent. The repetition of "I want" effectively conveys yearning and determination, though varying sentence structure or introducing metaphorical language could deepen emotional resonance and add layers of meaning.
Consider experimenting with line breaks and rhythm to enhance the poem’s musicality and emphasize key ideas. For example, isolating phrases like "to be on the front foot" or "leading the charge" could amplify their impact. Additionally, exploring more vivid imagery or sensory details might transform abstract concepts like "innovative and proactive strategies" into more tangible experiences for the reader.
Overall, the poem presents a clear and relatable exploration of communication’s role in self-advocacy and personal growth. Further refinement in language and form could elevate its emotional depth and memorability.
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