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IKnowNoBox

Jun 05, 2014 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

With Words

with words we cursed
feigned laughter
then ducked

with words we whispered
touched lips
then fucked

with words we transgressed
improvised apologies
then smirked

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: East Coast, USA

Favorite Poets: Weird Elf, Shel Silverstein, The Poet Anonymous

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Comments

11 years 1 month ago

WOW !! this is a cracker. I

WOW !! this is a cracker. I loved it and cant find fault....

Bravo excellent poem....

sorry but I cant critique something that is tight
and the theme is brilliant ...well thought out and executed

love Jayne x

11 years 1 month ago

I know

You know I would laugh at this one it is so neat,
but I think that some of the parts could have taken longer, lol
Your Ian.T

11 years 1 month ago

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Some situations just beg for words- and you give them. In neat quantity. It's like a whole week with a brand new woman/man: awkward, then not, hot, then comfortable.

Thanks for that :)

V

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11 years 1 month ago

Thanks for the comments all.

I have actually pondered over additional stanzas but I always came back to these core bits.

Oh words are indeed one of lives untapped apparatuses.

I was going for three examples of how words lead to, and get us out of situations.

In ink,
david