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World of the living dead

A distant cackle of a witch
Spells a crafted costume, stitch by stitch.
Clanking bones are moving in the wind,
Jack skeleton winked before he grinned.

Pumpkin heads seem like they're alive,
Glinting in the moonlit drive.
Ghosts and ghouls came out to play,
On this Halloween scary day.

The corpse bride, with her shriveled head,
A scary beauty before she wed.
Sparking an image of fear or dread,
In this world of the living dead,

About This Poem

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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Coventry, England, GBR

Favorite Poets: Michael Rosen , Rudyard Kipling , Pam Ayres , Benjamin Zephaniah

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neopoet

8 months 2 weeks ago

Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "World of the living dead" effectively creates a spooky and atmospheric setting with vivid imagery of Halloween creatures and characters. The use of descriptive language like "distant cackle of a witch," "clanking bones," and "pumpkin heads" helps to paint a clear picture of a haunting scene. The rhyme scheme and rhythm flow smoothly throughout the poem, enhancing its readability.

One suggestion for improvement could be to explore deeper emotions or themes within the poem. While the imagery is strong, adding layers of meaning or exploring the characters' motivations could provide a more nuanced and engaging experience for the reader. Additionally, considering varying the structure or form of the poem could add further interest and creativity to the piece.

Overall, "World of the living dead" effectively captures the essence of Halloween and the supernatural world, but further development of themes or emotions could enhance the depth of the poem.

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Leslie

8 months 2 weeks ago

Tigger Kaz

Great poem, very descriptive and a very fun read!

Clentin

8 months 1 week ago

Loved your poem. It really

Loved your poem. It really expresses the spirit of Halloween complete with the well known creatures.

Lavender

8 months 1 week ago

World of the Living Dead

Hello, Tigger,
A fun and joyful read! Maybe it's just me, but this seems pretty happy, overall. I don't sense any disappointment in this Halloween treat!
Thank you!
L