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eightmenout
Mar 17, 2016 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

The World on a String

Stop the earth and please
let me off.

There is a fine line
between lunacy and
brilliance;
between sanity, serenity and the
ability
to change the world.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allen Poe, Henry Rollins, Langston Hughes, Emily Dickinson

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Comments

Geezer

Geezer

9 years 4 months ago

I'm not...

thinking about logic or consistency, because the title just makes me think of the Yo-Yo trick "Around the World", in which the Yo-Yo spins on the end of the string and you swing it around and around!
I can see how anyone would want to get off from that ride! LOL A fun read, ~ Gee.

Rula

Rula

9 years 4 months ago

Scott

a great first line. I might think of using it one day, can I?