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Dec 29, 2024
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This year
Through these twelve chapters,
Twelve extinguished candles,
I was a million different people,
Interwoven into one.
I’ve lost beautiful souls,
And even more radiant ones
Have entered my life.
Although one star
Glowed brighter than ever,
Intertwining itself with my heart.
From loving alluring emerald forest trees,
And jade grass kissed by the rain,
To endlessly loving
The breathtaking ocean,
Azure sky hue,
The forget-me-nots holding two meanings,
Sapphire gleaming under the sun,
And blue feathers scattered on the ground,
That captivated me
In the most melancholic way.
So, even if unexpected and cruel
Events occurred,
There were also
Resplendent ones.
I view it all as tragically beautiful,
Twelve majestic, ethereal consolations.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
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neopoet
5 months 4 weeks ago
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "This year" beautifully captures the theme of transformation and growth over the course of twelve months. The imagery of candles being extinguished and new souls entering your life is powerful and evocative. The use of nature imagery such as emerald forest trees, jade grass, and the ocean adds depth to the poem and creates a vivid picture of the speaker's experiences. The contrast between tragic events and resplendent moments is effectively conveyed, highlighting the bittersweet nature of life. Consider exploring the emotions and reflections on these events in more detail to further engage the reader and enhance the impact of your poem. Additionally, you may want to experiment with the structure or form of the poem to create a stronger sense of rhythm or flow.
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Clentin
5 months 3 weeks ago
Very nice poem, captures the
Very nice poem, captures the 12 months of the year and the varied events that occurred