loved

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Yes,I Shall Wait

Oh my beloved,
As you go off to war,
I shall wait your return
In one piece

I shall be a single teen aged mother
Till your return.
Hopefully, your return
Is not with mournful trumpet call
Or Colours dipped on cobbles bare
As normally many do

Till then I shall await my Love,
For you,
As a widow
At this young age
It wouldn't do

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: ROU

Comments

Candlewitch

13 years 10 months ago

Hi Loved,

Nice work! But consider this:

Instead of:
Till you return,
Hopefully, your return

Till your arrival,
Hopefully, your homecomming

always, Cat

loved

13 years 10 months ago

Yenti AND Cat

hope this piece
can also now
be to rest
Amen

Race_9togo

13 years 10 months ago

Loved

This is good, but I don't understand the last two lines.

loved

13 years 10 months ago

thanks a great deal

in the repeated edits
the typo over came me
.Thanks for the cute observation
grateful

scribbler

13 years 10 months ago

hi loved

A good tale of what many young wives are going through. I agree with Jim about the last 2 lines though..........stan

loved

13 years 10 months ago

Thanks Stan

the typo has been blasted
sorry....
my above remarks do accept
thanks

loved

13 years 8 months ago

Where ru my friend

Stan ....
Lost in the wilderness of time
you can't be o man
you are the Stan
who always did stand

loved

13 years 8 months ago

relieved

thanks Rosy
have a great day
and also to stan convey

Race_9togo

13 years 8 months ago

wondered

where Stan had gotten to. Good to hear he's OK.

loved

13 years 8 months ago

Thanks

I am grateful