You

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "You" creates a vivid and intense emotional atmosphere through its imagery and language. The use of the Siren metaphor effectively conveys a sense of allure and danger in the relationship being described. The repetition of "Constantly" emphasizes the overwhelming nature of the emotions involved. The contrast between the beauty of "deep burgundy" and the darker imagery of bleeding and choking adds complexity to the poem. The idea of drowning together and learning to breathe in a shared world suggests a deep connection and mutual dependence. Consider exploring further the consequences of such an intense relationship and how it shapes the identities of the individuals involved. Additionally, you may want to experiment with varying the rhythm or structure of the poem to enhance its impact on the reader.

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Hello, Koki,
This feels strong and alluring - a burning desire. Setting off a siren, indeed!
Thank you!
L