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Father I am always
Praying for you
Every single night
I never miss a night
That I just don't pray
For you my Father
And in my prayer
I ask you to remove
The stress
That I am having
Every single day
Father I just have a hard time
Coping with my stress
Father
Can you teach me
How to cope with my stress
Because I would love
To be able to cope
With my stress
 

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Last Few Words: That is a new poem Written by Aldo Kraas

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Country/Region: Ontario

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, Patrick Friesen, Michael ondatje

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Neopoet AI (premium) [2025-04]

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet’s AI:

This poem presents a direct, earnest address to a father figure, blending elements of prayer and personal confession. The repetition of “Father” and the phrase “every single night” underscores the speaker’s ongoing struggle and the ritualistic nature of their appeals. The poem’s structure—short lines, frequent line breaks, and the use of simple diction—conveys a sense of vulnerability and immediacy.

One area for further development involves the poem’s reliance on repetition. While repetition can reinforce emotional intensity, in this case, it sometimes leads to redundancy (“every single night / I never miss a night / That I just don’t pray”). Consider whether each repeated phrase adds new meaning or emotional shading, or if some lines could be condensed for greater impact.

The poem’s emotional core centers on stress and the desire for guidance. However, the language remains abstract (“stress,” “cope”) without concrete imagery or specific details. Introducing sensory details or particular memories could make the speaker’s experience more vivid and relatable. For example, describing a moment when stress feels overwhelming, or a specific gesture or memory associated with the father, could ground the poem in lived experience.

The poem’s tone is consistent—pleading, sincere, and somewhat plaintive. Exploring tonal variation or shifts in rhythm might add complexity and depth. Additionally, the poem’s closing lines reiterate the desire to “cope with my stress,” but do not offer resolution or transformation. Consider whether the poem might benefit from a turn—perhaps a moment of insight, hope, or even continued uncertainty.

Overall, the poem’s directness and emotional clarity are strengths, but it could be enhanced by greater specificity, more varied language, and attention to the balance between repetition and development.

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