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lovedly

Feb 10, 2015 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

You can but can't

You can take a horse to the source of water
He will bray and nod his head as in nay
but then you will alone be a cause of laughter
he will then at you kick and say neigh, neigh!

first para of a sonnet today
come someone say
how did Loved
bray?

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: UNIVERSE...ETERNITY C/O ME, ROU

Favorite Poets: All across the Internet whom I read , and they inspire..

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Comments

10 years 5 months ago

THE UPPER CASE REPRESENT THE

THE UPPER CASE REPRESENT THE STRESSED SYLLABLES (mostly are the main parts of speech like the nouns , verbs, pronouns (if not in the beginning), adjectives and adverbs)

The lower case represnt the less important words (articles, functional words as prepositions, articles and some endings like the [er],[est],[ing]...

For a sonnet you need to put the unstressed syllable before the stressed

|my NAME| is LOVED|

i AM |a POET|

you can| TAKE a| | to the |SOURSE of | er

he will| BRAYand |NOD|his HEAD |as in NAY |

but THEN|you WILL| aLONE| be a |CAUSE of| LAGHter

he WILL | then at |YOU KICK |and SAY| NEIGH,NEIGH!

Does any of this make sense to you? Can you tell me which of your feet are iambic and which are not?

not a bad attempt by the way loved

10 years 5 months ago

i don't write with my feet

i use my hands Rula

10 years 5 months ago

Is that all?

did I mention anything about writing with your feet Loved?

10 years 5 months ago

OOOOOOO

now I //understand
foot//METER
iambic
pentameter
et//CETRA
got it //wow!

10 years 5 months ago

Shookum!!!

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10 years 5 months ago

Hi there

A good effort here Lovedly - Rula has some good pointers! it's not easy writing sonnets is it - stick at it you're doing well.

Love Mand

xxxxxx

10 years 5 months ago

thanks for your encouragement

I have little patience
but shall whenever
endeavour
friendly mand

10 years 5 months ago

now I //underSTAND

now I //underSTAND
FOOT//METer
i/AM/bic
penTA/meTER
et//ceTRA
GOT it //WOW!

10 years 5 months ago

long //WAY //someHOW

now I //under stand
foot //MET ER
i am bic
penta me ter
et//CE TRA
got// it // wow!

O//kay bet//TER// some //HOW
what // do//YOU// SAY //now?

10 years 5 months ago

'now' is stressed

and 'somehow' is SOME -how
xxx

10 years 5 months ago

Thanks

I// see //NOW?

10 years 5 months ago

UN -der -STAND

.
:)
Xxx

10 years 5 months ago

I KNow syllables

but don't KNOW where to stress
shall try AGAIN!

10 years 5 months ago

try

so TAKE | a HORSE | to WAT | -ers ALPH | -a SOURCE
he'll BRAY | and SHAKE | his HEAD | to YOUR | dis -MAY
a- LONE | you'll BE | a CAUSE | of LAUGH | -ter HOARSE
be -CAUSE | he'll KICK | and BUCK | while SAY | -ing NEIGH

xxx

10 years 5 months ago

wow

how I wish I was that Horse
so hoarse
will be back soonly....
Judy