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and all the words
are falling
through the floor
water is seeping
into every crack
walls bulge
with wide-eyed
ideals
no matter what
you won't be back
it's ok though
i can handle that

as a matter
of fact
it wasn't you
who broke
through
for every pane
for every ache
it's all still intact

did i ever mention
the way you
affected every
little thing i did,
i do-

all your
well-placed
anger
wrapped up
tight
in fourth
of july lights
handed down
your misery
held on
to some place;
some place we
could spend a night
believing it was
eternity

the poems are
dying now
words? they don't come
and even october
with its rainy mouth of grey
all fade
all fade

away

it's okay though
it's all okay

you can go

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: [This option has been removed]

Editing Stage: Not actively editing

About the Author

Region, Country: Melbourne, Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Bukowski, Neruda, Rumi, Gibran, Jeffers, Corso, Waldman, Kerouac

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Comments

Race_9togo

Race_9togo

14 years 3 months ago

CCfire

Welcome indeed. This poem is excellent, and needs no editing, as far as I can see. Is this an old one of your's?

CCfire

CCfire

14 years 3 months ago

Hi and thanks Jim, yes I have

Hi and thanks Jim, yes I have a few from the past few months of postings on AP that I would like some critiques on although this one is a finished one, a new keen eye sometimes spots things lol...I haven't done a lot of writing lately as I have been searching for a new home with new people to read and meet.

Bonitaj

Bonitaj

14 years 3 months ago

Hello CCf!

and WELCOME on board. You have a very distinct style of writing as I can see from the various pieces you have posted. Variations on a theme you do so well! I like you work and hope to see more of it!
CHeers

CCfire

CCfire

14 years 3 months ago

Thanks Bonita

I am happy to be a part of this new community and look forward to contributing more as the site gets up and running again. Nice to meet you :)

Bonitaj

Bonitaj

14 years 3 months ago

Hello CCf

and WELCOME on board. You have a very distinct style of writing as I can see from the various pieces you have posted. Variations on a theme you do so well! I like you work and hope to see more of it!
CHeers

Esker

Esker

14 years 3 months ago

jump to jump

drew this link from your comment
I enjoy your style of writing
as its similar to one I use

must go on a run downtown for
one of my "girls"
but shall return tommorrow
for more commenting

Thank You

CCfire

CCfire

14 years 3 months ago

Hi Esker

Thank you, I have read one of yours and I thoroughly enjoyed your style as it is similar, I look forward to more reading of you in the near future.

Roscoe Lane

Roscoe Lane

14 years 3 months ago

Yet again,

Yet again your talent shines, another great poem. Regards Roscoe..

CCfire

CCfire

14 years 3 months ago

Thanks J

Actually it flows pretty well with 'with' so thanks for the tip. :)

S

scribbler

14 years 3 months ago

hello

This is probably just a personal thing, but I think a few of the lines could be combined to good affect. Otherwise an enjoyable read.....................scribbler