Lavender

Oct 19, 2024 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

To You, Dear Autumn, A Villanelle

I bathe in the glory of your gold
Relish your kisses in the early morning air
I wrap my heart in crimson blankets you unfold

Embrace the silence in the evening cold
Adorn a fire if, the chill, too much to bear
I bathe in the glory of your gold

Your night holds stars, burned and faintly old
While a frost may fall, I am not aware
I wrap my heart in crimson blankets you unfold

Though poems, recited, and epic stories told
Few words proclaim what my soul shall declare
I bathe in the glory of your gold

My eyes, too bewildered to properly behold
The grandeur of your radiant wear
I wrap my heart in crimson blankets you unfold

My Dear Autumn, majestic, untamed, and bold
An unveiled gift of gems, chosen with such care
I bathe in the glory of your gold
I wrap my heart in crimson blankets you unfold

About This Poem

Last Few Words: I love to use "un" words - they add such a softness to the action.

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: United States

Favorite Poets: I tend to read Ted Kooser, Jim Harrison, Billy Collins, Paul Simon, Robert Frost. I like minimalist poetry, and poems reflecting on nature and Mother Earth.

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Comments

Sen99

8 months 3 weeks ago

Hello Lavendar

Very lyrical, kept a consistent form through the poem, the rhymes add to its musicality, enjoyed your poetic skills as always.

Lavender

8 months 3 weeks ago

Thank you, Sen,

It's an interesting challenge, and I really enjoy the form. Thank you, as always, for taking the time to read!
L

Rula

8 months 3 weeks ago

What a majestic write. A villanelle seems the ideal form to give Autumn its justice. I wrote one or two villanelle, but I don't think any of them is near to this one.
Trying to choose my favorite lines, I found it really difficult, but the closing is really superb!
Great job!
Thank you for sharing this gem.

Lavender

8 months 3 weeks ago

Hello, Rula,

Would love to see your villanelle sometime. Studying structured poetry is pretty fulfilling, and I'd always like to learn more!
Thank you for reading!
Lx

Triskelion

8 months 3 weeks ago

It seems to me...

..there have been a few villanelles around here lately. I will need to research them now if they are going to become popular here. I should be able to at least comment on the technical aspects when I see them. You have a noticeable dedication to poetry in general for trying so many new forms, Lavender, so thank you for that!

Cheers,
Thomas

Lavender

8 months 2 weeks ago

Hello, Thomas,

I learned about the villanelle form from a fellow bard here on Neopoet back in 2020. (I think.) Had never heard of it before. He and several others have shared so much great poetic information, it just feeds the desire to learn more. I hope you give it a go!
Thank you!
L

Candlewitch

8 months 3 weeks ago

Wow!

after reading this poem, I was smitten with it and its musicality! I had to read it again, I am stunned by the beauty in the art form! I would dearly love to spend a whole day inside your head! my favorite lines (hard chosen) are:

My Dear Autumn, majestic, untamed, and bold
An unveiled gift of gems, chosen with such care
I bathe in the glory of your gold
I wrap my heart in crimson blankets you unfold

*hugs and love, Cat

Lavender

8 months 2 weeks ago

Hello, Cat,

You are very kind. Autumn always feels so "regal" to me. This kinda wrote itself. The challenge with a villanelle is that it needs to make sense. I hope this was at least a bit clear.
Thank you for reading!
Lx