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Of You, I Feel the Warm.

You returned most unwittingly
baring your soul and your arm,
while I saw clouds, you tried on shrouds
never meaning any harm;

I think of you, I feel the warm;

I think of you and feel the warm.

~

Ships always pass, but the neglected mass
never knows to question, "why?"

I really wish I knew, what am I to do?
When together if we could fly;
we'd touch the ceiling of the sky!

~

There's another fact, don't know how to act
your smokey nature calls to me!
Time after time, again; my familiar friend
has shared her company; to set me, "free!"

When she should have just let me be;

I still feel the warm, just let me be.

~

Ships blindly pass, and the neglected mass
never knows to question, "why?"

I could have rocked with you, but what am I to do?
you thought we were merely, getting high;
to me we touched the ceiling of the sky!

~

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Again, this goes out to my Honey-comb.

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates, Poe, Dickinson, and Dr. Seuss. There are a smattering of others, but why bother listing 'em all, ya know?, I also rely on a few of our poets, here....for advice, and what not. I couldn't possibly explain what a fountain of live, effective knowledge we have...right here in our midst ! To catch a glimmer of brilliance, merely visit: the Stream.

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Ian.T

Ian.T

13 years ago

Doc

From this one and a few of your recent poems do I detect a change in style that just needs a while to settle down???????
Your older works were both serious and fun yet they had a song about them that kept my eye to the page, the eye seemed to wander or become stuck with this nearly new way of expression..
I hope that your flow will become as you think it should be, Yours Ian.T