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Dec 17, 2012
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your essence
Close your eyes.
Let me lead you by the beach,
As the wind takes your hair
Along the velvet skyline.
Let me lead you by the beach,
As the wind takes your hair
Along the velvet skyline.
The sun visable..
Thought a minor figure
Compared to your beauty.
Your very essence appeals to those in doubt,
And misleads the portrait of itself
To see you smile, priceless
As even my vision isnt perfect
I can see you 20/20
Your my hearts rival,
And in that can do no harm
Thought a minor figure
Compared to your beauty.
Your very essence appeals to those in doubt,
And misleads the portrait of itself
To see you smile, priceless
As even my vision is not correct
I can see you 20/20
Your my hearts rival,
And in that can do no harm.
Bliss is what you bring
Today is not nearly enough..i need u now
Tommorrow,
Forever, and thereafter
Open your eyes
About This Poem
Last Few Words: all my writing is on love. its what i like to write about the most.
Review Request Direction:
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Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Ian.T
12 years 10 months ago
Jay
I have played with the words and put them on PM for you to see.
Hope this will help in your future writes, Yours Ian.T