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Edward nigma
Edward nigma
Jun 10, 2021 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Your eyes of blue

Your eyes
wetted like the
morning dew.
Bathes in the
bashful beams
of blue.
Everything seems
to disappear
from my view.
Leaving only
me and my
love for you .

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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Region, Country: Virginia, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe homer Dante Alighieri Oscar Wilde , William Wordsworth

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Triskelion

Triskelion

4 years 1 month ago

...due...?

did you mean dew? Your poem has promise. I enjoyed L4,5 and 6 especially

Thomas

Edward nigma

Edward nigma

4 years 1 month ago

Thank you

Thank you I try to put emotion behind well my inspiration is music it usual helps me come up with an Image for me to get an idea or a rhythm for me to follow .

samary

samary

4 years 1 month ago

Hi

Hi
I wondered why you had chosen the line breaks in your piece for the visual appearance?
For the reader breaking the lines in this way is a disruption to thought, I think it would read better as longer lines your enjambment is leaving the at the end if lines which is always a waste of that prime position.
Try it with longer lines and read it aloud and see what you think. You may disagree.
Sam.