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Your own worst enemy!

When night falls
and dark angels call.
Who will be there
to take that last fall?

Are you bound for hell
well you just can't tell.
Some would say
there's a different way.

Does anyone really understand?
The decisions you've made
may have gotten out of hand!
In the end you're your own man.

Living a dream
that you can't comprehend.
You've no one to turn to
in the end!

About This Poem

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About the Author

Region, Country: South Ogden, Utah, USA

Favorite Poets: Jon Anderson, Jon Ondrasik, Donald Fagen, Sting, Eric Bloom , and all of the poets at neo.

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Lavender

Lavender

6 months 3 weeks ago

Your Own Worst Enemy

Hello, John,
Ah... thoughts at night can cause all kinds of havoc. The language and rhyme is fairly simple, but I understand the depth and complexity of this theme.
Thank you,
L

Leslie

Leslie

6 months 3 weeks ago

L

Thank you for the read. I know it's not alot. I just heard today that a freind committed suicide. I don't know how it happened, but I'm sure He'll be alright!

Leslie

Leslie

6 months 3 weeks ago

L

Thank you for your concern!