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Jan 24, 2023
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Your Poetry is My Muse Hope you are Amused
Have you ever noticed
animals behave better than many human
smaller animals
from oceans to seas to land
evolved
till all culminated
as a monkey
have you ever noticed
monkeys were
the first one to peel
a banana
then man learned it too
how lovely is the feeling
of peeling
monkeys bestowed to you
have shared 94 percent
of their genes
man is asking
how much longer they will take
to share the balance
so till then let's lay
shake and merry make
eat lovely pastries and cake
yes you bake
lovely muse yours ...friendly
poetree
be more at it
peel bit by bit
About This Poem
Last Few Words: If you read this slowly you will feel it sensuously ...
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Geezer
2 years 5 months ago
Not feeling...
the sensuous feeling you said I would get, [and I really wanted it], it just made me hungry, with that talk about bananas and trees, all that I could see in mind's eye, was me lying in the crotch of a tree, peeling bananas and eating them. I had to go get a little more breakfast. ~ Geez.
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lovedly
2 years 5 months ago
sorry for the dissatisfaction Gee
Will try something
after some one else also feels
dull
Triskelion
2 years 5 months ago
Wow!
I didn't realize you're supposed to peel a banana before you eat it....guess I need to go to the zoo more often.
.
.
Hmmm. I wonder if I can do that propeller thing the hippopotamus' do...I guess I should start growing a tail now?
Thomas
lovedly
2 years 5 months ago
you are great
Thomas
c how we forget our teens
lol
all peel
Triskelion
2 years 5 months ago
Dang!
..lovedly...do you ever sleep?
Thomas
lovedly
2 years 5 months ago
old age
most sleep
I click click laps keys
nothing much to do
@83
Thomas and you?
Triskelion
2 years 5 months ago
Just
got home from work 6 sips of triple sec ago. The zoo is closed, so I'll have to surf more education from the animal documentaries...think I'll check out the amarula tree vids...purely educational of course
Thomas
lovedly
2 years 5 months ago
hope u've
rested
Thomas relax
no need now at 83
to tax