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Program description/goal
Description: Modern Day Renga Poetry
Leader: Barbara Writes
Moderator(s): raj
Objectives: To bring Neopoets together to sharpen their poetic skill, share their poems, and critique Poetry of others. It is a place to interact and co-write Poetry together.
Level of expertise: Open to all
Subject matter: Renga Theme: Rain/Raindrops is to be written in Japanese format. Haiku 5/7/5, senyru 5/7/5, tanka 5/7/5/7/7 and Renga (Eternal string of tanka)
Length
30.00 days
Number of participants (limit)
100.00 people
Skill level
Date
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raj
7 years ago
Each droplet of rain
Each droplet of rain
a mercenary of life
god sends from the skies
we hear them knock on roof tops
waking us to join rain dance
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tyro
7 years ago
how do you join, are there
how do you join, are there instructions about the forms or must research them yourself?
raj
7 years ago
tyro the form you have to use
tyro the form you have to use here is Tanka of 5 lines conforming to sequence of syllabi 5/7/5/7/7 to the theme of raindrops/rain. Barbara would then consolidate such tankas posted to form a Renga
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Barbara Writes
7 years ago
Thanks raj
I couldn’t have said it so precise being as detail as I can get sometimes. Lol
Barbara Writes
7 years ago
Hi Tyro
Nice to meet. You join by commenting here and asking. I just add you
alidzain
7 years ago
Hi Barbara, I want to join this workshop
Not sure if this qualifies
Tears of heaven
quench the thirst of the earth,
plants and animals.
the rebirth of the dead land
celebration of life
Alid
raj
7 years ago
Hi Alid
wonderful to see you back....loved your Tanka...
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Barbara Writes
7 years ago
Hi Alid
Great poem but your syllables count is off
5/7/5/7/7
You are in
alidzain
7 years ago
gee, Barbara
can you point out where cos I can't find it.
Alid
raj
7 years ago
Alid, if i may step in
Alid, if i may step in
quench the thirst of the earth [six syllabi],
celebration of life [six syllabi]
I am sure you can fix both
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raj
7 years ago
suggestions
quench the thirst of the earth [six syllabi], could be turned to
quench the thirst of mother earth [seven syllabi],
celebration of life {six syllabi] could be turned to
true celebration of life [seven syllabi]
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tyro
7 years ago
Hello Barbara
Hello Barbara
do you post your poem here, or in the stream?
Barbara Writes
7 years ago
Hello tyro
Post your poem here
Heartfelt
7 years ago
Response
this poetry form is new to me. Glad it was introduced, I know that it consist of two stanzas and multiple writers. What if you don't have anyone to collab with?
Barbara Writes
7 years ago
Hi heartfelt
You are here collabing now. That’s what this workshop is all about. Just share your haiku or senyru here with two couplet added and you have a tanka.
Barbara Writes
7 years ago
Love fall from heaven
Love fall from heaven
dark skies rain clouds are forming
silvery droplets
body cries out for comfort
from a stream boiling inside.
raj
7 years ago
adding my two pence
sometimes as drizzle
at times in heavy torrent
drops of rain perform
the stage suddenly lights up
to announce upcoming act
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Barbara Writes
7 years ago
Wonder two pence
Just a tad syllables count 5/7/4/8/6 correction 5/7/5/7/7
raj
7 years ago
thanks Barbara for the catch.
thanks Barbara for the catch. I have now conformed to 5/7/5/7/7.
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tyro
7 years ago
Sun heats the waters
Sun heats the waters
Mist is freed of gravity
The clouds puff out full
Butterfly exits cocoon
As clear drops fall on my head.
raj
7 years ago
Welcome tyro to the Renga
Welcome tyro to the Renga with your vivid tanka...
"as clear drops fall on my head" create a picture that you are enjoying the rain without an umbrella
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raj
7 years ago
Came up with this oneof Napolean
kids get excited
to sail paper boats on streams
to voyage their dreams
some are of the warrior
Napoleon Bonaparte
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Barbara Writes
7 years ago
Great poem
I really like this little nugget. It’s not about rain or raindrops but kids sailing paper boats on streams works for me
raj
7 years ago
one more...
grey clouds bear rain drops
form rainbow against sunlight
to brush them on soil
soon a painting emerges
so very pleasing to eyes
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Barbara Writes
7 years ago
Great
Nice one
raj
7 years ago
how about this
kids splash in puddles
adults walk in umbrellas
two talking pictures
first iconic of delight
other of missing the bus
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Sparrow
6 years 11 months ago
Barbara
Misted by the sun
Cooled and mixed in with the dust
Drops to thirsty earth.
Children splash in the puddles
This is life itself to all.
Ian..
Barbara Writes
7 years ago
Wonderful Ian
Add two more lines, a couplet with 7 syllables each and your haiku will become a Tanka.
Sparrow
7 years ago
Barbara
Hope this is what you need for the Tanka, have a lovely day out there, Yours as always Ian..xx
Barbara Writes
6 years 11 months ago
Wonderful wonderful
I think the second line in the 3 line haiku needs to more syllables. I count five. I maybe off tho being American dialect. lol.
Barbara Writes
6 years 11 months ago
Beautiful lines.
Im not sure cooled and mixed are two syllables. Would you share the dictionary. I’ve realized dialect are different.
Sparrow
6 years 11 months ago
Barbara
I must have used a bad counter so now corrected the problem, Thanks for all you do,
Take care and my love to all,
Yours as always Ian. x
raj
7 years ago
it's foot ball world cup time hence this :)
drenched from head to toe
kids return home in delight
because schools are closed
sun smiles again from the sky
to watch children play football
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weirdelf
6 years 12 months ago
oo oo, Barbara, I'm late joining this one!
Do I follow on from raj's
sun smiles again from the sky
to watch children play football
?
raj
6 years 12 months ago
Jess
it doesn't necessarily have to connect with the previous Tanka... you post your tanka and Barbara latr connects all tankas posted here like links of a chain....in a separate link
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weirdelf
6 years 12 months ago
ta
raj
raj
6 years 12 months ago
one more
why is rain biased
about when and where to fall
rather than bless all
flooding some with her riches
not reaching those famine lands
raj
6 years 11 months ago
one more
sweeping all rubbish
that is littered everywhere
cleansing air as well
if ever she is enraged
wrecks a havoc in her path
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Barbara Writes
6 years 11 months ago
Glad you’re here jess
You can write a whole Tanka. Or as you did a couplet to raj haiku creating a Tanka. Collaboration at its best. I’ve allowed changes as they make the workshop more creative and inspiring. Not rigid or strict to form. Except for 5/7/5/7/7 is the only for Japanese. I am expanding to other forms as raj is saying but haven’t yet. It’s time now to do so. ready to create it with other poetry forms that is still collaborative in native. .
Barbara Writes
6 years 11 months ago
I’m wanna thanks everybody
If I’ve left out anybody’s ready to go Tanka let me know so I can correct it. Sparrow alidzain and heartfelt are ones I see haven’t been linked to renga. . Let me know how I can help get you there. Happy rengas are happy poets