LissaMine

Feb 22, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

~Inspirations~

Where do you get your feelings
The ones we get to see
Ever get stuck with inspiration
That's whats happening to me

Do you write of heartbreak
Or of a love that you have lost
Do you write your inner dreams
Or for the ones that mean the most

Are your poems for your children
The loved ones in your life
Maybe they are for your husband
Your lover or your wife

Do you write of your past
The memories you cant forget
Maybe your poems come from passion
Misery, anguish or regret

Maybe you feel depression
And that's why you choose to write
The words of a confrontation
An argument or fight

The pain you feel inside your heart
You boldly disclose it here
Just to have someone listen
A quiet but friendly ear

Putting words on paper
Allowing them to be seen
Read in fact by strangers
Their interpretation of what they mean

Whatever your inspiration
Be it big or small
Is very welcome for us readers
I read and love them all

— LissaMine, Feb 22, 2009

Critiques

JWwildcat2012

17 years 3 months ago

You summed the poet up very well

This poem should serve as a reminder to writers as to why they write in the first place.I like that your content is easily crafted.Poems do not always have to have complex wording,or endless stanzas to make their points.This poem is wonderful truth to that.There are many things that poets can chose to write about.You show them here that if they run into writers block,and need a subject,all they have to do is view this well written work.Good job,sweetie.

LissaMine

17 years 3 months ago

Thank you James

Thank you for your comment!! I was stuck for something to write.. so Inspirations it is. I must say thankyou to Tink who said... theres your inspiration!! I hold it true, whatever befall; I feel it, when I sorrow most; 'Tis better to have loved and lost Than never to have loved at all.

Morgana Tragic…

17 years 3 months ago

Inspirations

Beautiful poem Lissa...I love how you used your lack of inspiration to inspire you. That just proves that inspiration is truly something derived from anything and everywhere...stunning.

LissaMine

17 years 3 months ago

Thankyou Katie

Glad you liked it. See we can write about anything... theres a million inspirations... including inspiration itself. I hold it true, whatever befall; I feel it, when I sorrow most; 'Tis better to have loved and lost Than never to have loved at all.

Craig Norris

17 years 3 months ago

stuck for inspiration...

Well Lissa all I can say really is, it'll be pretty nice to read something when you're not stuck for inspiration. This is generous of feeling, enjoyed it heaps. Craig.

LissaMine

17 years 3 months ago

Thanks Aussie

Heaps huh? lol I say that and no one here gets it...but this is the country that thinks Y'all is a word. :) I hold it true, whatever befall; I feel it, when I sorrow most; 'Tis better to have loved and lost Than never to have loved at all.

Tink

17 years 3 months ago

Well done Lissa!

You did it! I like the flow and the meaning. I like that fact that you took from nothing and made something. I'm glad I could help. Proves that you just have to be open and find that "thing" that is always right in front of you, if you just look at it! Live, Laugh and Love (and don't forget to write) Tink

LissaMine

17 years 3 months ago

Thankyou Tink

It was all because of your idea! Thank you! I hold it true, whatever befall; I feel it, when I sorrow most; 'Tis better to have loved and lost Than never to have loved at all.

LissaMine

17 years 3 months ago

Thank you Janice

Thankyou for your lovely comment! I hold it true, whatever befall; I feel it, when I sorrow most; 'Tis better to have loved and lost Than never to have loved at all.

Nordic cloud

17 years 3 months ago

I agree I agree with them all above

Very good poem LissaMine, yes anything can be an inspiration, it is us who read into all things around us, perhaps to entertain ourselves, or to feel our feelings about what we see, hear, taste, and smell. Its all magic - or banal, depending who is doing the looking. Yours Ann of Norway

LissaMine

17 years 3 months ago

Thank you Ann of Norway

Thank you my friend.. :) I hold it true, whatever befall; I feel it, when I sorrow most; 'Tis better to have loved and lost Than never to have loved at all.

Sydney Rae

17 years 3 months ago

This is really good, and

This is really good, and nothin but the truth. :) Great job!

LissaMine

17 years 3 months ago

Thank you

Glad to have you as a new buddy! I hold it true, whatever befall; I feel it, when I sorrow most; 'Tis better to have loved and lost Than never to have loved at all.

Conect11

17 years 3 months ago

sweet and tender at the same time

and there's a boldness to your scheme, good work! Mark W. "our hope is in the living God, who is the Savior of all people and particularly of all believers." 1 Timothy 4:10

LissaMine

17 years 3 months ago

Thanks Marky!

Sweet Dreams to you! I hold it true, whatever befall; I feel it, when I sorrow most; 'Tis better to have loved and lost Than never to have loved at all.

KambateSpike

17 years 3 months ago

this is cute and has a nice rhythm

good subject matter, the simplicity is nice. We all know how I feel about Hallmark verse, but as always, that's my personal preference . This piece could go on forever or inspire myriad others. I'd love to see you return to the subject in the future.

LissaMine

17 years 3 months ago

Thanks Spike

Thanks for commenting I hold it true, whatever befall; I feel it, when I sorrow most; 'Tis better to have loved and lost Than never to have loved at all.

Ink Dragon

17 years 3 months ago

Lissa,

wow, straight into spotlight with this one! A really great write, and a subject that zeros in on the questions we, as writers, keep asking (and some of the answers, too). Yours, ~Nina P.S. Some apostrophes are missing (I am a pain in the bum about those little buggers): l.4: whats-> what´s, l.14:cant-> can´t

LissaMine

17 years 3 months ago

Thanks Nina!

Im very happy with this one... I hold it true, whatever befall; I feel it, when I sorrow most; 'Tis better to have loved and lost Than never to have loved at all.

LissaMine

17 years 3 months ago

Thanks Amartya

Thankyou! my friend! I hold it true, whatever befall; I feel it, when I sorrow most; 'Tis better to have loved and lost Than never to have loved at all.

Pheonix

17 years 3 months ago

Lissa

Great job and a wonderful read. Regards, Nix

LissaMine

17 years 3 months ago

Thanks Nix!

Who knows... I was inspired lol I hold it true, whatever befall; I feel it, when I sorrow most; 'Tis better to have loved and lost Than never to have loved at all.

debskatz

17 years 3 months ago

Hi Lissa

First of all, let me say that as I'm brand new on here, this poem is the first one I've read here. So take that into consideration with my review. I don't understand the style being freeform, yet you gave it a rhyme scheme. I'm used to freeform having only an occasional rhyme with unset meter, isn't that the point of freeform? I do like your poem. As one reviewer put it, you really describe the poet and his/her motivations quite nicely. All of your rhymes were good except "most" & "lost." They are sight rhymes, but poems are made to be read aloud and they certainly do not rhyme when read aloud. Because it does have a rhyme scheme, it would be better if it also had a consistent meter. I found a couple of what I'm used to calling "spag": "That’s what(')s happening to me" "The memories you can(')t forget" Overall, a very nice poem! smiles, deb

LissaMine

17 years 3 months ago

Hey..Welcome to Neopoet

Firstly when you post a poem..it can either be Freeform, Western Classic or Japanese... so when rhyming is an option I will post under that. The Most and Lost was a tricky one... any suggestions? Thanks for commenting! Lissa I hold it true, whatever befall; I feel it, when I sorrow most; 'Tis better to have loved and lost Than never to have loved at all.

debskatz

17 years 3 months ago

Hey

Yeah, I saw the options when I posted a poem. I figured doing so would enlighten me & it did! I really hope that soon they will offer a different way of doing it or more options. I don't have any suggestions for correcting that rhyme. I'd just advise you to check out a rhyming dictionary & see what you can come up with. Good luck with it! smiles, deb

LissaMine

17 years 3 months ago

Thank you

Lissa I hold it true, whatever befall; I feel it, when I sorrow most; 'Tis better to have loved and lost Than never to have loved at all.

TheUnknownAuthor

17 years 3 months ago

Just started today

But I must say that I'm deeply impressed. Hope to see some more of this kind of writing here and never put down that pen girl:)

LissaMine

17 years 3 months ago

Thank you and Welcome

Hope that you enjoy the site as much as I do. Lissa I hold it true, whatever befall; I feel it, when I sorrow most; 'Tis better to have loved and lost Than never to have loved at all.

infinite_dwarf

17 years 3 months ago

Lissa

Good flow on this one. The only thing that I would personally leave out (though some peope may like them) are the little doo-dads at the end. I just don't think emoticons have a place in poetry. ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- -"Three things that take forever to get here: birthday, Christmas, and the pizza delivery boy." - Garfield the Cat

LissaMine

17 years 3 months ago

Thankyou...

Thanks for the comment... I got rid of the hearts... :) Lissa I hold it true, whatever befall; I feel it, when I sorrow most; 'Tis better to have loved and lost Than never to have loved at all.

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