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Craig Norris
Apr 08, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

prayer flags

prayer flags flutter
prayers, flags flutter prayers
prayer flags flutter

wheels gently spun
release words om
mani padme hum
— Craig Norris, Apr 08, 2009

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Morgana Tragic Proprietress

Morgana Tragic…

17 years 2 months ago

Hey Craig!

Nice to see something from you, feels like I haven't read a poem of yours for while! Is it that I missed or something or you just haven't posted in a while? lol. Anyways, I like this poem, short and simple. Love the repitition of "flutter", I simply adore that word. Reminds me of butterflies, pretty butterflies. For such a short poem, it even feels complete, nice going! Peace n Love Katie
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Craig Norris

17 years 2 months ago

Hey Katie !

Nice hearing from you, did the flutter of prayer flags catch your eye? Haven't posted for a while it's true so I thought I would pay my due. I really like the way those three lines are so symetrical they actually look like a flag. Craig.
Morgana Tragic Proprietress

Morgana Tragic…

17 years 2 months ago

Nice

Yeah, you know, I didn't even notice the symetrical shape of the words, thats cool! A very nice piece, Craig, as always. Peace n Love Katie
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Craig Norris

17 years 2 months ago

flags and wheels

The Tibetans and the Nepalese have that great prayer thing going with flags and wheels, the prayers are written on flags and engraved on wheels so whenever they are moved by the wind or spun by hand prayers are sent out. This little poem does the same, whenever anyone reads it, it sends prayers for them into the cosmos, prayers of peace and love and jellie beans. Craig
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

17 years 2 months ago

This sounds lovely

Like the sound of the fluttering, fluttering. We can hear it Craig, so well. I hope all your prayers will be answered. Ann of Norway
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Craig Norris

17 years 2 months ago

to you and to all

thanks Ann, I like my brave little flag, ask not for whom it flutters, it flutters for you. Craig
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

You make us all feel the flag flutters for us alone.

Oooh that was quick, I'm still back on the other one! Only discovered this trying to make repairs to my own which didn't work. Well you already have my comments on your last page where I assume you created this in response? Never know with you... always so much unknown with you Craig Norris... hows that for irony. You are a clever word weaver & a clever heart stealer I think, you make us all feel the flag flutters for us alone. That takes some skill my lad. Flutter away & be happy, joy is always a good thing to spread, hopefully thats how the story ends, with joy. I worship at the feet of the lotus... Om mani padmi hum xx Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."
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Craig Norris

17 years 2 months ago

at the feet

Hey Anni the flag does for us when we come home when we say goodbye it flutters in an emerald sky some say there is no direct interpretation of the six syllables, nor one that could be contained within a few sentences, the Dalai Lama has said the meaning could be seen as, with the practice of combined method and wisdom, transformation will occur in body and soul leading too...the mind of the Buddha. Now this is pretty cool, you get to say all that in six short syllables, and every time you say it you move closer to the Buddha mind. Each syllable harmonizes a state of being, so your prayer flags bless you Anni, 'cause they're saying it all the time Craig
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Ink Dragon

17 years 2 months ago

Hi Craig,

the first stanza with its playful repititions caught my eye. You did a really great job in capturing the reoccuring "mills" of prayer here. Yours, ~Nina
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Craig Norris

17 years 2 months ago

Nina

It does have a playful air to it, and gets a bit of balance with the heavier action in the second stanza. Glad you enjoyed, keep well. Craig
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R.T.

17 years 2 months ago

Lovely!

The syntax here really creates an image of fluttering flags, fluttering prayers. This poem makes me think of war times. Families putting flags outside their homes for their young men to come home, praying the war will be done soon. That's just my take on it. Lovely! R.T.
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Craig Norris

17 years 2 months ago

Houston we have syntax.

Hi R.T. thanks a lot, love your work. Hard to avoid that imagery with whats been happening. You guys would have seen a bit of it. What was writ upon the prayer flags was the same as on the wheel. Craig.
faerybeki

faerybeki

17 years 2 months ago

Hi Craig, have read this one

Hi Craig, have read this one loads, just not commented before. I love the sound it creates, I am left with flapping, fluttering sounds in my mind long after the words have gone from my screen. I love the sentiment expressed in the poem and comments too. Great job to evoke so much from seemingly so little :) much love b x
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Craig Norris

17 years 2 months ago

little things grow

Hi Beki, this is great that you like it, and I must admit that I find it quite complete. That rustling fluttering thing can't really be avoided and it's evocative, then smoothed off by the spinning wheel so there's a balance and I like that. Luv back craigAKACHUCKNorris

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