Two Midges

The grey of evening
two midges do a love dance
I sigh happily

— faerybeki, May 17, 2009

About the Author

Country/Region: GBR

Critiques

Craig Norris

17 years ago

can't believe it

how could this sweet thing get left out here, Love this Bek, it's a gem, those midges were dancing for you. Craigx

faerybeki

17 years ago

Thanks Craig, for leaving a mark here, I was wondering if perhaps the title was a bit of a turn off? so glad you liked it, I love this form, the snapshots, like pressing pause for a second if you know what I mean? Thanks again Craig, much love b x

Craig Norris

17 years ago

not a turn off

Don't see the title as a turn off Bek, but as you mentioned it, I guess the other title which kinda springs to mind is, Loves dance. At the end of the day though it's the cake not the icing that's important, not that you would get many kids to agree, specially if it's pink or chocolate. It is a great form, I like the way you can read them and then sit within the mood or feeling that is evoked and remain there in quiet contemplation. Totally the opposite of so much free form which can get overcooked and oversauced. Cheers Bek Craigx

faerybeki

17 years ago

Craig, you’re right,

Craig, you're right, it's great how just a few lines can take you to a different space or mood. Still thinking about this title though, will let it bubble away for a while, and see what pops up. A good balance of icing and cake is best :) Thanks again Craig, more love b x

themoonman

17 years ago

No turn off here either...

I love nature and its captivating beauty... and I like that Craig too... love this form Beki... you do it well! Richard

faerybeki

17 years ago

Hi Richard, thanks for your

Hi Richard, thanks for your presence here, so happy you think I do it well, as I do seem to be writing a lot of them at the moment (been reading an anthology of 'Zen' poetry, lots of haikus lol) so you're likely to get some more ;) much love b x Ps i've got a picture of you, at one with nature, surrounded by people who love you, barefoot in the 'daddy dirt' :) thanks moonman, more love b x

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