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Invisible

I hide a dark secret from the world in shame
whenever he hits me, I take the blame.
It's not just the fist that breaks me in half,
but at my agony he just laughs.


I can claim no honor or dignity too,
it's hard to be brave when your black
and blue.

How can I plan with a mind that's blank?
How can I run on an empty tank?

So late at night when you hear me cry,
please don't roll over with another sigh.
I know it's hard to sleep through nights like this,
the sound of my flesh hit by a fist.

Soon, there may come a time when
you hear me no more, the years of
abuse left behind closed doors.


Look out the window, my final ride
without any pain, my name in the
obituary that gave invisible a name.
— dina grey, May 22, 2009

About the Author

Region, Country: Coastal area, NC

Favorite Poets: Sylvia Plath, Hemminway, Too many.....will add in time.

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Craig Norris

17 years ago

so much abuse

it is so widespread, seemingly in every culture, under every God. I will not critique harshly, but I would like to say that this does not have the smooth flow of your other work, most likely I guess because it is such a difficult subject. the last line of the first stanza needs something more I feel, an extra syllable or two for rhythm, It's not just the fist that breaks me in half, but suffering the agony to the sound of his laugh Hope you don't mind me doing this, just ignore it if its innapropriate, the ending too could possibly benefit from a little adjustment, the repitition of the word, name, doesn't really work and do justice I feel. I'm only saying this because I really like the poem, great work. Cheers Craig
DG

dina grey

17 years ago

Flow

You are right. I have writen and revised so many times. It's not my best. It is a difficult piece to work on. Thanks, Dina

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