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Life 1...

Sun beating down on our bare bodies,
making them burn, burn, burn.
Bare foot runners.
Hitch hikers in shorts.
Forward, backwards, going slow.
Ghosts.
The atmosphere a strong cool wind, blowing in your face,
the tall white sails.
Amateur photographers they don't even know how to use an instamatic.
People writing about the universe, creating obstacles in their path.
Concrete, grey, ugly, faceless buildings.
Voices disappearing with innovated sounds, a muted recording.
Graphic poetry - wall posters.
Colours to the sounds,
do they match.
Words and notions on the go.
Limestone rock formation along the edge.
Railway journeying south,
an experience in life...
— Fleur MacDonald, May 25, 2009

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PRB

17 years ago

Vivid.

Vivid.
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Craig Norris

17 years ago

let me guess

railway journey south, Woolongong? Enjoyed this look through your looking glass. Cheers Craig
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Craig Norris

17 years ago

Rocky to Brisbane

That's a mighty fine line, went to Brisbanes first ever Disco wedding, when the celebrant asked if anyone objected to the union of these two, a guy dressed in rally drivers overalls said "yes I do" threw the bride over his shoulder, in her white mini skirt and veil, and made off to the car park. Hilarious, but not for the groom. Craig

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