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Craig Norris
Jun 08, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

so I know

When you came to me
and smiled
with your eyes

I read your journeys'
all of them
and so I loved you

but you caught me by surprise
when you kissed me
lighter than a butterfly
upon my eyelids
and on my forehead

when you left
you took me with you
and so I know.
— Craig Norris, Jun 08, 2009

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Fleur MacDonald

Fleur MacDonald

17 years ago

You had

me till the last stanza and then it dropped off the back step, and so i know, not to keep walking or I will fall into the sheep dip. Baaa :)fleur
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Craig Norris

17 years ago

elusive little lamb

but then you knew they could be, and don't play near the dip Fleur there's plenty of room in the paddock. Love. Craig
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

17 years ago

Hello

I enjoyed the soulful trip your gentle words took me on, especially the ending. Always, Cat
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bjp

17 years ago

Dear Craig,

Perhaps love really arrives with the sap of spring. You are one of Olya's favourites. And now I must report to her that you have left your words with your leather jacket back in the muscle car. There will be many who like this, which is all to the worse. If you wish to seduce, this family asks that you do so "more well". Four stanzas, four digs. Affectionately, Brian
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Craig Norris

17 years ago

have I hit a nerve

dear Brian, do the butterfly wings that flutter by you disturb with their artless flap. I am but a traveller. This is a purely personal little write and I don't expect too many others to be engaged by it. Regarding the muscle car, I think WC would be more your man, I'm pretty sedate on four wheels. Love. Craig
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bjp

17 years ago

Dear Craig,

Perhaps I should apologize for being too familiar with the use of cheekiness. Affectionately, Brian
MV

Miss Vivian

17 years ago

This is astoundingly deep

This is astoundingly deep (as I love of your writing, so much) and phenomenally beautiful - a descriptor that is constant in my thoughts of your work. This writing Craig, stays with the reader. V Thank you

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