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Because of You

I've never felt so comfortable,
 never felt so clean.
Old hesitancy's fading
 and my hand rests on your jeans

I forget about my failings
 when you look at me that way -
You kiss me like you need me
and your eyes, they never stray

Did you know my world goes still
 when I stand inside your arms?
You're just not like the others -
 you and your old-world charms

I know we're not meant to last  -
 such good things never do
Just know that you have taught me
that oneday I'll love me too
— Giuliana Isabella, Jun 20, 2009

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Seren

16 years 11 months ago

This is pure senitment that

This is pure senitment that works , except for you last line ...you rhymed all the way through and the change in cadence just left me flat a little ... but other than that it is an awesome piece of work , worth working on ... Love Jayne
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Giuliana Isabella

16 years 11 months ago

Thank you so much Jayne

I'm so glad that you saw my sincerity in my simple verses. This one wasn't pre-meditated, but came from a place of real feelings. I appreciate your advice and took it, and changed the last verse to better suit the rest of the poem. I hope you approve :) Many thanks again for your words. Giuliana

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