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Craig Norris
Jul 17, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

in the sun

If I were a chocolate biscuit
I should like to lie
upon your belly
in the sun.

Run upon you
sweet and warm,
feel your fingers
try and catch me
down your sides,
as I slide.

You could pass me
to your lips
where I could die
so I could live.
— Craig Norris, Jul 17, 2009

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Country/Region: AUS

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bjp

16 years 11 months ago

Dear Craig,

This is a edible poem. I would go well with a red port, like Taylor's. Welcome back. I have missed your golden pen. Brian
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Craig Norris

16 years 11 months ago

Dear Brian,

that's very nice of you, thank you so much, it's a little fun poem which makes me feel good. Craig
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 11 months ago

Yummy, yummy.i lick

Yummy, yummy. i lick fingers, i lick toes in my mouth heaven goes, now where did i put the raspberry syrup? Well, what did you expect early in the morning? Lol. "Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood." T. S. Eliot
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Bonitaj

16 years 11 months ago

wow -

This is 'Juicy' as the teenagers say! delectable write! welcome back Boni
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Craig Norris

16 years 11 months ago

Hi Kels

I wish there was another way to spell lie that didn't invoke the thought of telling untruths. Lay sometimes seems a bit too weighty for me, but thats me. Cheers and thanks Craig
Seren

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

You had me with the choccy biccy Craig

LMAO yummmooooooooooooo delicious write my friend welcome back from whence you been ... this is lovely have missed your wriitngs wondered where you had disappeared to , though its good to have you back , now wheres the Milo ? LOL sucking tim tams through hot Milo you got me hungry LMAO ... Love Jayne x x
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Craig Norris

16 years 11 months ago

now that's a new one

my daughter and I sometimes bite the end off Tim Tam biscuits and suck milk up through them like the kids we are, but to suck biscuits through hot Milo, now that would require a very large straw. cheers Craig
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Ink Dragon

16 years 11 months ago

Craig,

glad to see you're back! And with such a sweet, yummy poem, too! Enjoyable summer imagery (and chocolate, too!). Yours, ~Nina
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Craig Norris

16 years 11 months ago

Hi Nina

yes I am rather envious of you northerners and your summer, though we should not complain as our winters are mild by comparison. cheers Craig
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Craig Norris

16 years 11 months ago

Hiya Bek

be careful now, remember what happened to the gingerbread man. cheers Craig

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