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Craig Norris
Oct 22, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

this slivered moon

Past this window descending
lowest edges aflame
by reflections molten
amidst night's deepest black
this arc, this slivered moon,
teasing my thoughts to follow
to the west,
body trembles an empty room
I thought of holding you
courage and pretense abandoned,
a boy again
alone
naked,
falling to the stars.
— Craig Norris, Oct 22, 2009

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Ink Dragon

16 years 7 months ago

Craig,

I cannot believe no one has commented yet! This one's a beauty. Even though there is a missing apostrophe again ;) in l.4 (night's), I was completely entranced by your words. Yours, ~Nina
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Craig Norris

16 years 7 months ago

Nina

it seems like such a long time ago we had our first discussion about the use of the apostrophe. I'm afraid that I appear to have learnt very little. Appreciate your comments and very happy that you enjoyed this one. cheers Craig
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odd molly

16 years 7 months ago

Yes Craig.. I agree so much

Yes Craig.. I agree so much with Nina.. this is a beauty. I love the last lines: * a boy again alone naked, falling to the stars. beautifully written Craig and you are a amazing poet..five stars love o molly
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Craig Norris

16 years 7 months ago

o molly

so happy that you enjoyed this attempt of mine to catch a fleeting feeling, and I guess that is what I love about poetry, taking those moments and giving them clothes to wear. love. Craig

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