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HELL'S GATE
HELL’S GATE
In the humid back room of a bar in Rangoon
I at last met the man I’d been seeking.
Poured raw gin in his cup, (stopped his throat drying up)
He gulped some down and then started speaking.
“Son, don't be too surprised, for this tale is all lies,
But don't blame yourself ; I think you should go
You must know; can’t you tell? There’s no gateway to Hell
It’s all newspaper talk…” I shouted “NO!”
I let go his shirt stud and he wheezed and coughed blood
Then rasped “You win, I’ll tell you what I‘ve done”.
I was strangely surprised by the look in his eyes
Seemed like a triumph, as if he had won .
When he started to talk my face turned white as chalk,
For I knew then I’d have to be brave
He'd gone into a mine that had closed since the time
Miners tunnelled into a large cave.
In the cave, set well back, was a door : massive : black :
All covered in skulls and strange runes
A jab with a pick nearly made them all sick
As the skulls belched out foul, greenish fumes.
The door was thrown back, with a sickening crack
As this daemon from Hell now appeared
He winced as he said,” All of my men had fled”
That thing was the nightmare he'd feared..
Huge, slimy and green with a translucent sheen,
It saw him through six yellow eyes
Five mouths and four lips showing yellowed fang tips
Each hand had claws monstrous in size
He threw spears at the beast,all blessed by a good priest
The third skewered the Daemon's green chest
It collapsed and he knew, it was dead, dead! It’s true!
He'd kept the skin, burned the rest.
“I’m a hunter, like you, but the best I can do
Is a tiger or leopard or lion
For a daemon, old man, I'd give up my right hand!
Why, I’d give my soul if I could try one!”
“You’re not so damned clever-you’ve got it forever!”
The old man was dancing with joy.
“The first time a full moon, you will change, and that’s soon!
For tonight is the night, my brave boy.”
And so it has been, every full moon since then
Its skin wraps round me, head to feet.
I become the green daemon and stalk any human
To feed my great hunger for meat.
IF YOU GO OUT TONIGHT AND THE FULL MOON SHINES BRIGHT,
REMEMBER THIS TALE, FOR IT’S TRUE
BEHIND YOU THE SCRATCH OF A CLAW ON A BRANCH ?
IT’S THE DAEMON, AND HE’S HUNTING YOU !
Critiques
Skumpfsklub
16 years 4 months ago
A campfire poem
Jonathan Moore
16 years 4 months ago
Nice flow, a few stumbles, good story
Tam the Chanter
16 years 3 months ago
Thanks for the crit.
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