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phattmatt
Member since December 30, 2014
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Wheelchair Man
As I ride
I want to take you
to the far side
though me and you
stayed in the same place
looking for my fortune
let me grew out of touch
aint flashed a smile
for a long while
to concerned of how
I gonna provide for my family
my thoughts takes me back
of who can I trust in this cold world
as I roll I grew of a strong will
Read the rest of the poem Show less
rolling uphill I battle on
even though it’s a long month
I tag along
it’s the last day now
it shouldn’t be long now
before I can smiles
on my wife and three girls faces
payday is here
my baby girl tug at me with a smile
with the sight of luxury
makes me wish the moment
can stay a little while
tomorrow is back to normal
back at work so stiff and formal…
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- January 2015
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16 FriReceived a critique
on Wheelchair Man from @judyanne
"i think this is great – it just needs breaking into stanzas in order to make it clearer here is one suggestion and i have placed a few offered edits for some of the lines i like your unique voice, and don’t wish to corr…" -
15 Thu
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14 WedReceived a critique
on Wheelchair Man from @Barbara Writes
"I like where your theme is going but reading was like kinda hard to follow as it jump from one lovely moment to the next too quickly. The critique from Ellie and Wesley is really good. At the end of the day it's your wo…" -
03 SatReceived a critique
on Wheelchair Man from @wesley snow
"There is too much "string of consciousness" and not enough form to make it easily understood. The thoughts jump from one to another too fast for me, but this may have been your intention. Viva the experiment." -
03 SatReceived a critique
on Wheelchair Man from @BettyBuff
"Hi Phattman! Now, as most poets on here will tell you I'm totally experimental and into verse libre (free verse) big style! However, before you break rules, you need to know what they are! Free form relies very heavily…" -
02 Fri
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01 ThuReceived a critique
on The Realm from @wesley snow
"I hope you find NeoPoet to be a place of exploration for you. We are a workshop environment, so the stress is on improvement in the poet. Take a few days and read. Don't comment on the poems merely, but critique them. T…" - December 2014
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31 Wed
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31 WedFirst publication
The Realm
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31 Wed
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30 TueJoined Neopoet
Membership begins
First poem published 1 days later.
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About me
always writing in spare time but open for critic because i am an amateur poet
Location: South Africa
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