Quillsvein1

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Impressions (after looking at Van Gogh's "Sunflower")

Posted Jan 30, 2010 · 17 lines · 2 critiques

Angry beige cornea in dried sunflower,

The ghost signature a lost

pulse skeleton

Serrated jelly foliage I

am the fifteenth

nearing it’s bitter end

I am the dried leaf about to burst apart

In strands of foliage desperate

wind broken hair

A peering stitched black eyes in

the broken necked sunflower

Stitched acrylic cartoon bled summer

Snail broken wind grass joy,

disarrayed objects

Vase sink and confused orange blunder

Palette melted in paint stroke

Orange follicles balding winds treat love

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June 2022
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Anniversary
15 years of membership
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10 years of membership
June 2012
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5 years of membership
March 2010
15 Mon

Received a critique
on hum from @Kassie
"I always love reading poems about writing poems - not sure how to express it but its always sort of humorously ironic in a weird kind of way ... anyway I think my babbling has become a little nonsensical i better stop =…"
02 Tue

Received a critique
on Impressions (after looking at Van Gogh's "Sunflower") from @Pamela A. Lamppa
"Hello Congratulations! Your poem has been nominated for the New Advocate's Spotlight award. The following detailed critique will be considered in the decision making process. I think you have handled the descriptive tel…"
February 2010
19 Fri

Received a critique
on Impressions (after looking at Van Gogh's "Sunflower") from @yenti
"If you take all the petals off one side it would look like the painter, lol, Sorry just had to say that, this is a good picture of a painting but is copying , so it would be better to find your own flower to paint but a…"
11 Thu

Received a critique
on fear and comets from @whitetea
"I always love reading your work, I never can know what is next. I agree with Poe. In the summer a large green meteor ripped through the sky, it was during a meteor shower but it went completely untracked and surprised e…"
02 Tue

Received a critique
on hum from @Arrow
"and the end was especially strong with the image of light over the river. I had to read this several times as I struggled with the transition from stanza 1 to 2 as it set the image of someone being stung in the eye then…"
02 Tue

Received a critique
on hum from @whitetea
"inspiration remains to be a mysterious source. loved this."
January 2010
30 Sat

Posted a poem
Impressions (after looking at Van Gogh's "Sunflower")
"Angry beige cornea in dried sunflower,"
Open thread 17 lines
24 Sun

Critiqued
"A Different Christmas" by @weirdelf
"Conception was accepted by Mary, Jess. You're looking at it from a purely intellectual point of view--from that perspective, of course you're going to despise Catholicism or Christianity. If you did it with the Greek Go…"
24 Sun

Critiqued
"Final Act" by @Arrow
"out five stars just because I'm friends with people, but I must say that my opinion of your status here--one of the best poets--has not wavered in the slightest. "God, you look terrible– the ratty hair, the acne, skin l…"
24 Sun

Critiqued
"preparing for war" by @Seren
"of a "warrior's state of mind", and how. I can taste the proverbial blood dripping from your ferocious syntax! lol. You seem a little too gentle to me though to be wielding it all around like Spartacus. Great job Seren"
24 Sun

Critiqued
"Sweet velvet glimpse" by @orgami
"I cannot be objective judging your poetry. rich are the layers on carriage comfort you draw drawl/and glis"tening teeth reveal behind red welcome." Ahh. It is my favorite genre: undiluted surrealism, images aflow in the…"
24 Sun

Critiqued
"Speaking of stones..." by @Kailashana
"reads more like a surrealistic, ringing, imagistic prose poem than it does a narrative story with characters, all that--although perhaps it's only the introduction we're seeing? Reminded me quite favorably of Novalis' "…"
24 Sun

Critiqued
"Another abyss" by @weirdelf
"This aphoristic little piece is like a sock in the face. Very existential and at the same time grounded in reality. Yes, it is all slipping away, but not the all in all, not that. Excellent! GB"
24 Sun

Critiqued
"an acorn falls" by @raskin
"a moment into just a few words, just the way Williams' did with your example the "Red Wheelbarrow"--it is excellent, but you as recall Williams also encouraged us to "show, don't tell": maybe instead of "deadfall" you c…"
22 Fri

Received a critique
on hum from @Seren
"Bravo Gb ... wonderful write,this is my new favourite, one I will come back to again and again love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x x"
21 Thu

Received a critique
on hum from @weirdelf
"with a mind, wordcraft and imagery like that, how can the ink not flow? symphonic embryos priceless Cheers, Jess, reprehensibly irrepressible"
21 Thu

Posted a poem
hum
"The buzzing hum of solitude;"
Open thread 15 lines
17 Sun

Critiqued
"Unshriven" by @weirdelf
"Jess, and hit close to home for me. I only understood it after reading it twice, but that was my headache and not your poem. Sometimes it is hard to discern between people who have been abused and the real sociopaths. T…"
17 Sun

Posted a poem
(Untitled)
"Alone, fixing himself"
Open thread 48 lines
08 Fri

Posted a poem
Loyalty (*prose poem*)
"I went to a barber. I really liked this guy. Since childhood he reminded me what a young man I was. Holding throat cancer in a recorder and pressing it to his chin, a dim buzz cut through all that noise. “What style?” Paul would never have asked me that. It was about time, though. He showed me the first one; I couldn‘t see, but it all looked easier than television. “What crime did I commit?” I asked, wild horse panic. A beefy prison guard with a crew cut (he was easily confused for a man among inmates) and chipped red nails wiggled a fat index finger to a leakage in area where criminals got their hair done. Tears spurted from a black dot. Red. A sort shed by icicles at winters’ end, meaning that much. Skin with a just, stern character of rigor, ice bagged blue, varicose eyes (those white marbles flipping). “All this,” he whistled painlessly, spitting teeth, “and for what?” Auburn locks grazed the lines on my forehead. And me? I knew my own blood when I saw it. “What about ?!” I screamed to an upper tier at 60. “Blood brothers.” “what style?”. Paul had grown tired and wanted to go home."
Open thread 1 lines
04 Mon

Posted a poem
After LSD: A Mall, 1996
"                 1."
Open thread 42 lines
December 2009
27 Sun

Posted a poem
An Elegy for One Both Living and Dead
"I unzip today's breakfast."
Open thread 29 lines
20 Sun

Posted a poem
Bitter Fruit (Tantalus Breaking)
"All day I watch and play"
Open thread 6 lines
18 Fri

Posted a poem
The Church Basement (prose poem)
"Since my veins were open during the seance exposing an undue amount of blood and the foetuses falling form my forehead were aborted, it seemed a good idea.  Getting to Church.  I arrived a few hours late for services 12:00 am, 12:00 pm, I had nowhere else to be.  I parked in the back and noticed steam roll like butter from my chipped green engine.  A cornea began contracting and refracting like a soft bowflex made from silver.  Seeing red, I noticed a man hanging from a piece of wood: it appeared he was bleeding to death?   I made a design in the window's frosty pane and broke in.  I tried wrenching him from this four sided wooden wheel.  No dice.  "Should I call an ambulance?", I asked feverishly.   "I've been everywhere", he said, "and I firmly believe I'm safest here.  Have you seen our candles?"  A cop with a face like an angry hamburger barked at me.  "Someone's dying in there!" I protested.  Instead of handcuffs, he bound me together in the freezing cold with rosaries and worry beads. "
Open thread 1 lines
12 Sat

Posted a poem
Tantalus in Saigon
"He dips a tea bag.  Stale"
Open thread 28 lines
November 2009
30 Mon

Posted a poem
1997
"I come to meet a man"
Open thread 28 lines
19 Thu

Posting milestone
100 poems posted
19 Thu

Posted a poem
Abandoning Post
"Pale and unfit for duty."
Open thread 20 lines
October 2009
29 Thu

Posted a poem
Dawn in New York (after Lorca)
""Dawn in New York bears"
Open thread 37 lines
January 2009
30 Fri

Most-discussed work
I Am Not

11 critiques to date.
June 2008
22 Sun

Anniversary
One year of membership
July 2007
15 Sun

Highest posting month
July 2007 — 13 poems
June 2007
24 Sun

First critique offered
on "THE WONDER WHEEL" by @Michael F Vinning
24 Sun

First publication
"Still Life at 19"
22 Fri

Joined Neopoet
Membership begins

First poem published 2 days later.

15 years of membership

10 years of membership

5 years of membership

on hum from @Kassie

on Impressions (after looking at Van Gogh's "Sunflower") from @Pamela A. Lamppa

on Impressions (after looking at Van Gogh's "Sunflower") from @yenti

on fear and comets from @whitetea

on hum from @Arrow

on hum from @whitetea

"A Different Christmas" by @weirdelf

"Final Act" by @Arrow

"preparing for war" by @Seren

"Sweet velvet glimpse" by @orgami

"Speaking of stones..." by @Kailashana

"Another abyss" by @weirdelf

"an acorn falls" by @raskin

on hum from @Seren

on hum from @weirdelf

"Unshriven" by @weirdelf

100 poems posted

One year of membership

July 2007 — 13 poems

on "THE WONDER WHEEL" by @Michael F Vinning

Membership begins

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