Skumpfsklub

Member since March 29, 2008

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Bubble bath

Posted Feb 3, 2010 · 6 lines · 6 critiques

It's sudsy in the tub and warm.
The bubbles have a friendly form.
The room is quiet, clean and bright.
A Lowenbrau near on my right
stands by in case I start to thirst.
Perhaps I should have disrobed first.

Skumpfsklub’s timeline

March 2023
28 Tue

Anniversary
15 years of membership
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Anniversary
10 years of membership
March 2013
28 Thu

Anniversary
5 years of membership
February 2010
13 Sat

Received a critique
on The poem review of Damocles from @orgami
"I give an extra star for comment although there is no change in original ol poem still its good to see that this is a workshop and not all work can be expected to be rolled out without some detailing notification I knew…"
08 Mon

Received a critique
on Bubble bath from @Kailashana
"LOL. Oh, no you aren't you keep taking baths in your clothes. Trying to save water? Soap? Both? Tiny bubbles... in the water...Pop! ~A"
05 Fri

Received a critique
on No, those pants look good on you from @themoonman
"My standard answer is "you look lovely", the bad thing is she doesn't believe me anymore. The poem is ok for me, has some spots where it could be improved for flow of the tongue, I see your meter is important, ten sylla…"
05 Fri

Received a critique
on No, those pants look good on you from @Seren
"Thought this one needed a long overdue review lol ;) I (repeat) again the same old boring things --- minus say My tongue is stuck mid swing, like a rut Invention fails; my words have stubby wings ---great line (I can) f…"
04 Thu

Critiqued
"SEDUKSHUN" by @orgami
"So, poets are the ones who feel the water heating up. Alerting the other lobsters is what they do---and what they oughta do. No quarrel with that. The vague communication, though, that the water's getting hot, is not en…"
03 Wed

Received a critique
on Bubble bath from @Kailashana
"LOL, Perry. What does that mean, then, that I would vote for it? There is no accounting for time or taste. Especially since I wrote my own version of it. ;-) ~A "What we do for ourselves dies with us. What we do for oth…"
03 Wed

Received a critique
on Bubble bath from @Kailashana
"Well, for all the critiques you give so religiously, my dear.... you should get naked, at least for your bath if not in your poetry. This one leaves a lot to be desired, if you know what I mean. ~A p.s. "I have had a bl…"
03 Wed

Received a critique
on Bubble bath from @raskin
"Great punch line, gave me a good laugh. Gotta watch out for the suds, both. raskin"
03 Wed

Posted a poem
Bubble bath
"It's sudsy in the tub and warm."
Open thread 6 lines
02 Tue

Critiqued
"Do Not Multiply Entities without Cause" by @Rob Graber
"I've said before that I have gods. I recommend to everyone that you make some gods for yourself. They're very convenient, when you take the time to make useful gods. It isn't a difficult task. I made my first god when I…"
02 Tue

Critiqued
"Translucency" by @orgami
"Otherwise, though, this is good stuff. I'm never sure how wide you mean to cast your words. I don't have the impression you want to be perpetually obscure, but the plain fact is that your work skirts obscurity or descen…"
02 Tue

Critiqued
"Translucency" by @orgami
"Otherwise, though, this is good stuff. I'm never sure how wide you mean to cast your words. I don't have the impression you want to be perpetually obscure, but the plain fact is that your work skirts obscurity or descen…"
02 Tue

Critiqued
"Do Not Multiply Entities without Cause" by @Rob Graber
"Very nice piece, Rob. I shall refrain from offering my view of 'the razor.' (It's not a bad policy, but not one I can agree with whole-heartedly). That notwithstanding, you do good service here, giving the naive reader…"
02 Tue

Received a critique
on Bleed a little, too from @Kailashana
"I love this *thoughts on parade*.... your problem is what exactly? ~A "What we do for ourselves dies with us. What we do for others and the world remains and is immortal." Albert Pine"
01 Mon

Posted a poem
Bleed a little, too
"All you do is open a vein"
Open thread 26 lines
January 2010
31 Sun

Critiqued
"The Lesson of the Greedy Double Dater" by @docmaverick
"You did it deftly enough. Too much 'poem' takes away from 'joke,' and it is The Joke That Wanted Telling. Perry"
31 Sun

Critiqued
"The Table" by @Merri Robbins
"I, for one, am enchanted by the thing. The passive-aggressive hissing of scorned furniture? Hooda thunk it? The formal plan is well-executed---and in no way does it get between the reader and the subject matter. There i…"
30 Sat

Critiqued
"Vocabulus Eruptus" by @Lonnie
"L7 'ubiquitus' s/b 'ubiquitous'"
25 Mon

Posted a poem
The Skumpf Sklub Saga (an incomplete work)
" The sea retreats and leaves on land the germ of Skumpf Sklub's soul A seething heap upon dark sand, obsidian and coal"
Open thread 20 lines
21 Thu

Posted a poem
Put the razor away
" The cheat insists the game was fair"
Open thread 18 lines
18 Mon

Posted a poem
An agony
"My sorrow mine is played out now"
Open thread 20 lines
July 2009
22 Wed

Posted a poem
'Lemon' is an alternate metaphor
"A girl I know treats man as dog or cat"
Open thread 14 lines
14 Tue

Posted a poem
Just another damn rant from a disgruntled lout
"You bastards mutter lyric, formless, freeee."
Open thread 18 lines
13 Mon

Posted a poem
A 'how to' sonnet, written for a kid with a poetry assignment due yesterday.
" Which socks to wear today? I have to choose.  "
Open thread 26 lines
June 2009
28 Sun

Posted a poem
Twelves #2
"How did I get this bug, what will it do to me?"
Open thread 14 lines
27 Sat

Posted a poem
"Airhead"
" "
Open thread 44 lines
25 Thu

Posted a poem
Untitled #1
"As always rest thee in my hand a warmth,"
Open thread 17 lines
22 Mon

Posted a poem
Sodium chloride
"I wish the salt were still in its shaker"
Open thread 10 lines
March 2009
28 Sat

Anniversary
One year of membership
April 2008
21 Mon

Most-discussed work
The Battle of Squeamish Hill

16 critiques to date.
15 Tue

Highest posting month
April 2008 — 20 poems
March 2008
30 Sun

First critique offered
on "Guilty Designs" by @Abstrakt
29 Sat

First publication
Hawks aloft
28 Fri

Joined Neopoet
Membership begins

First poem published 1 days later.