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tsbabadepoet
Member since December 16, 2011
Member for 14 years, 5 months
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My Dream
If only we can hold on to it
Feel and live just as it went
I will forever look forward to you
You paint my thoughts with hope
It's on your foundation that am a success
I stood at my porch every morning with the strength I gained during your visit
Your absence each night is the knock of bitterness
Your embrace is the warmth of peace
The light that makes a glorious morning
It's for you I look forward to dusk
For each second away from you is a threat to my hope
Come to me and bless me an icon among men
And forever will I be in debt to you
Oh my sweet dream.
tsbabadepoet’s timeline
- December 2021
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16 ThuAnniversary
10 years of membership
- December 2016
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16 FriAnniversary
5 years of membership
- October 2013
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29 Tue
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28 MonReceived a critique
on My Dream from @wesley snow
"... I had a little trouble with this verso libre and as China I felt it suffered from cliche. However, it is remarkably emotional." -
28 MonReceived a critique
on My Dream from @China Blue
"I found this poem dripping with cliches but the emotion is there. Also the use of "I" is redundent perhaps you can drop some of them and the sentence will stand on it's own. For example Instead of saying I stood on my p…" -
28 Mon
- February 2013
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16 Sat
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15 Fri
- December 2012
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16 SunAnniversary
One year of membership
- February 2012
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23 Thu
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21 TueReceived a critique
on My val from @emogothgirl
"i hope this girl finds out somehow! i too like to write this way sometimes. nicely penned. always, mag" -
21 TuePosted a poem
My val
"Am sure you don't know. You just don’t know how much I care, you just don’t know how my head aches when I think of losing you, yet your thought still remains the cure to my aches. You just don’t know my tears, my loss for sleep, loss for taste and muse into holding you in my arms again when u left for school on J6." - December 2011
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16 FriJoined Neopoet
Membership begins
First poem published 1 days later.
- May 2010
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22 SatReceived a critique
on LIFE AS IT SEEMS from @chumfin
"this poem is very powerful, the more you read it more meaning you get from it. chumfin" - April 2010
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27 TueReceived a critique
on Life,an art from @weirdelf
"just under the title, you will see a button ""Edit". If you click that you can revise the poem as it is posted. Cheers, Jess, Reprehensibly irrepressible" - January 2010
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06 WedCritiqued
"Mind bruised by thoughtful fists. part four" by @Lunegirl
"your piece is a mind set that speaks the act of men that love for the physical appearance of their spouse and not that which exist in the mind.i like the story with the poetic plot.For real dear, it's great." -
06 WedFirst critique offered
on "Mind bruised by thoughtful fists. part four" by @Lunegirl
- December 2009
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22 Tue
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21 Mon
- October 2008
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25 SatPosted a poem
Caveman
- September 2008
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19 FriPosted a poem
the mind
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08 MonFirst publication
LIFE AS IT SEEMS
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08 Mon
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