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CLICHES workshop poem :It only comes once
CLICHES workshop: It only comes once
It's all good<
Until you hurt some one
Keep it on the down low<
It’s best they don’t find out
It ain't nothing but a chicken wing<
When I look at the scheme of things
I am truly
Hot to trot<
To see what comes of this
A mile a minute<
You run your mouth
To many cooks spoil the broth<
Then plans fall apart
Silence is golden<
Just keep your trap shut
Free as a bird<
To do as you please
Love is blind<
But not for long
A necessary evil<
Is good some times
All hands to the pump<
Get ready here it comes
The lesser of two evils<
I hope for your sake
Acid test<
You still must pass
Scarce as hen's teeth<
I am for you
The icing on the cake<
If it all works out
I'm game<
As long as no one finds out
Rotten to the core<
Is what you are, haha!
A rolling stone gathers no moss<
But some times you can’t avoid bumps
Like a seven year itch<
You’ve wanted this
Keep your nose to the grindstone<
And do what you must
Knock it out of the park<
Show them all who you are
Knock the cover off the ball<
In this endeavor
Age before beauty<
Only in this case
Fresh as a summer's rain<
You’ll smell at the end
Deeper than the deepest ocean<
Should be your thoughts
doing my head in<
Is my worry for you
step up to the mark<
And begin this long term plan
rise to the occasion<
This is your final chance
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Barbara Writes
14 years ago
many cliches causes blindness
you did good writing this. my eyes hurt trying to read it all and still find a flow that works. lol
great work
Eduardo Cruz
14 years ago
Barbara
Good, I don't think so. this poem is truly a mess.
Eddie
Barbara Writes
14 years ago
i agree its a mess
because i could not find a flow any where that worked lol.
which is what cliches tend to do not flow well. you did good with what we are given
lou
14 years ago
Eddie
Another great use of cliches
Lou
Eduardo Cruz
14 years ago
thanks i think you guys are
thanks i think you guys are just being nice
Eddie
Barbara Writes
14 years ago
Eddie
you did good considering I have read worse.
Eduardo Cruz
14 years ago
I don't know if that's a
I don't know if that's a compliment huh!
Barbara Writes
14 years ago
Eddie
It is
try reading Ian cliches lol
Barbara Writes
14 years ago
Ian
lol love you Ian
no I have not read the edited version, but I will. you've edited it already?
Eduardo Cruz
14 years ago
Chrys
Did you just call my poem a mess?
I am a good poet, I went for mess and achieved it. Hooray!
look guys I won!
(Chrys did you get my payoff, He whispers in her ear)
Eddie
Eduardo Cruz
14 years ago
hahaha!
hahaha!
Kailashana2
14 years ago
Hahaha! I liked your cliched
Hahaha! I liked your cliched mess.
But what smells at the end? lol.
Barbara, you're hysterical--many cliches cause blindness, along with mental masturbation?
~A
Eduardo Cruz
14 years ago
Chrys
Ian explained it better then I could ever.
Stop laugh at me I'm sensitive. LMAO!
Eddie
Barbara Writes
14 years ago
hahaha
I'm a babe here - mental masturbation causes blindness? lol
Eduardo Cruz
14 years ago
Ian
Thanks, that's a dead on explaintion
Water wings not working, damn things didn't bring instructions!
(note to self: call Ian maybe he knows how they work)
Eddie
Hooded Stranger
14 years ago
Eddie
Eddie,
I can't see how any of us can make the poems personal when we have little alternatives to use, nobody can make all those cliches personal sounding.
Mine is better than yours Eddie!
LOL!
HS
Eduardo Cruz
14 years ago
Dan
I'm the best cliche writer here, I know crap when I see it, and mine is the best crap. lol
Eddie
Kailashana2
14 years ago
*Your's is the best crap*? I
*Your's is the best crap*? I'll go along with that.
;-)
~A
Hooded Stranger
14 years ago
I agree with...
...you, it is crap and how embarrasing that any new members are going to come along to this wonderful site and judge us all as being totally crap!
Luckily for you Eddie, their first impression will be correct!! LOL!
HS
Eduardo Cruz
14 years ago
Or
They'll be so bad, that they'll think we are really abstract poets, and reveir us,
Fuck as someone said here I can"t remember, maybe Anna, we've created a new form/style. LOL!!
Barbara Writes
14 years ago
And
I like that book idea Anna came up with
Neopoet book of cliches also
How to write Non Cliche Poems
it could be a soft cover book or online book teaching aid
or something
great ideas we come up here can be income source for Neopoet once published
Eduardo Cruz
14 years ago
Anna
Do you need change for your two cents, LMAO!!
Wise ARSE!
Love you girl,
Eddie
Barbara Writes
14 years ago
Eddie
yep lol
Barbara Writes
14 years ago
Ian
i think that a great idea
i don't know why but i can't seem to get into blogging thing
i am though filing all these ideas in a file on my computer for the day when such ideas are made possible
raj
14 years ago
Eddie
it certainly a hard thing to do to use those assortments of cliches..under the circumstances your effort was good...i am going nuts while trying to have a go at it...lol...
Eduardo Cruz
14 years ago
raj,
the point is we can't write in cliches, so why crack your head. cliches a poem does not make. originality is everything. it's your voice that must be heard in the poem. That's why this workshop is good and fun. it challenges our brains.
thanks to Chrys, who I will kill later LMFAO!!!
Eddie
Barbara Writes
14 years ago
Eddie
who is the petty lady
i have recreate my cliche' poem already waiting to see what to do next.
Eduardo Cruz
14 years ago
What monday?
I posted the re-write already!
Fast Eddie
Eduardo Cruz
14 years ago
Barb
That my lady Jonette, the woman I'm in love with. I much rather look at her face then mine.
I posted my re-write to the stream already.
Eddie