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Barbara Writes
Barbara Writes
Jun 23, 2011 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)
This poem is part of the workshop:

Cliches and their use

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Cry Me a River (Cliche's Workshop Poem)

It's all good when some say
Keep it on the down low
then it ain't nothing but a chicken wing

There are those that insist on having it their way
Too hot to trot when expected to change
Then talk a mile a minute tuning out understanding

At other times too many cooks spoil the broth
then Silence is golden
and emotions are free as a bird

When love is blind
sex becomes a necessary evil and
all hands to the pump lose control

Once the lesser of two evils
makes vital an acid test
that’s scarce as hen's teeth
It’s the icing on the cake
when I'm game and
rotten to the core

A rolling stone gathers no moss
just like a seven year itch has any release
so keep your nose to the grindstone
Seeking a way to love life

come Knock it out of the park
and Knock the cover off the ball
then you will see Age before beauty
is as Fresh as a summer's rain
and Deeper than the deepest ocean

Now cry me a river because you
can't have your cake and eat it too
when demanding the best of two worlds

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Billy Collins, Shakespeare, , Emily Dickinson, , , Whitman, Jess Tapper

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Comments

K

Kailashana2

14 years ago

Like I said we may have

Like I said we may have started a new genre of poems. Cliched but loving it.

We should get a book of these poems together and call it Neopoet's best cliched poems, don't you just love it?

~A

but why the hit & miss caps?

Hooded Stranger

Hooded Stranger

14 years ago

Barbara

Barbara,

I must say most impressive indeed and you have more cliches...are there more on our list now?

regards,

HS

Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

14 years ago

HS

i don't think my three is there, i included them thinking Chrys might add them to the list. if not it is written in a way that removing the ending won't affect the poem much

Race_9togo

Race_9togo

14 years ago

Hiya Barb

Wow, not bad at all, you actually made a poem outta that rubbish, lol!
Good job.

loved

loved

14 years ago

its full of cliches,but you have not used the most common ones

every cloud has a silver lining

all see breasts
but your heart is chicken

hard as stone
but its only bone

and so on like
till the cows come home
they deeper the well
more the gold

smile and the world smiles
weep and u weep alone
right cliches or not
don't count ur chicken
before they are hatched and
so onnnnnnnnnn

good effort my u r my examiner
i must say
well doneeeeennddd

Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

14 years ago

Hi loved

these are the cliches that were given by Chrys
thanks for reading and commenting

loved

loved

14 years ago

thanks

Pardon my ignorance i have posted one

Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

14 years ago

hey loved

Me and you should take votes to see who would win more mentally challenged lol

loved

loved

14 years ago

me and you should take votes to see who is the most mentally cha

me and you should take votes to see who is the most...UMEAN MORE,.... mentally challenged lol

obviously me,
its an open challenge
you win saying that
for persons like me,
have to be challenged
To liberate
And SET them free

TO THE POINT OF DERANGEMENT,
IN ORDER TO BE COMPETING
IN POETRY COMPETITIONS
WITH STALWARTS....
ON THE DIRECTIONS OF EDDIE!
WHO is to blame don't ask me.

Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

14 years ago

loved

I'd get the more votes for mentally challenge as I have no idea what you are talking about.
"obviously me,
its an open challenge
you win saying that
for persons like me,
have to be challenged
To liberate
And SET them free"

because NOBODY have to be mentally challenged to liberate.

lou

lou

14 years ago

Hi

I think you made a good job of it.

Lou

Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

14 years ago

Hi Lou

thanks
it kinda fun trying to make good poetry out of cliches. people need a lot of creativity to make cliches work because cliches will bore you to blindness lol

Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

14 years ago

Barbara

good job,
these damn cliches threw me off when I wrote mine.
thank the cosmos, I went be graded for this, because for sure i'd get an "F"

Eddie

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

14 years ago

Workshop: Cliches and Their Uses

Dear Barbara,

You have done a very good job making a poem out of that messy list of cliches. I know it wasn't as easy as you made it look. You managed to keep some of your style in the structuring :)

always, Cat