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Jun 23, 2011
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Intrepid (Cliché Workshop poem)
intrepid
damn you charlie brown,
tiny tim and sam hall,
It's all (finger lickin') good
and it ain't nothing but a chicken wing
when you're hot to trot
and too many cooks (doth) spoil the broth
keep it on the downlow you say,
silence is golden
but I'm free as a bird
when love is blind
a necessary evil
the lesser of two (evils)
the icing on the cake
the acid test when love is blind
and scarce as hen's teeth
free as a bird
all hands to the pump
a bird in the hand is worth a mile a minute
I'm game or the icing on the cake,
rotten to the core like a seven year itch
never forget you're a rolling stone...
gather no moss, deeper than the deepest ocean
fresh as a summer's rain,
age before beauty
is trite enough but never long enough
to knock it out of the park
to knock the cover off the ball,
follow the bounce.
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Candlewitch
14 years ago
Anna,
A piece of very good work!
always, Cat
Hooded Stranger
14 years ago
Anna
Good job!
You made it look easy...which is most annoying because I really struggled with mine and then I read yours which just flows so well.
You are off my Christmas card list if you win the prize!
Lol!
HS
Kailashana2
14 years ago
Well, just keep me on your
Well, just keep me on your card list, if it ain't broken don't fix it. ;-)
How come no one told me I had 2 *the's*? Should we be rewriting it Dan, to include Barbara's 3?
~A
Hooded Stranger
14 years ago
Anna
Anna,
I won't be re-writing, it was tough enough as it was.
HS
raj
14 years ago
looks like you guys are
looks like you guys are having fun with use of cliches which seems to be the theme of your work shop...from what i have read of others i now get a hang of it a lil that everyone is given a set of cliches to use in their poem...i find that the mix of cliches provided has increased the level of difficulty if it is mandatory for every cliche to be used in the individual submissions....sort of a scrabble...anyways its a good theme...but i think the participants should be given more freedom to choose cliches although the number of cliches to be used can be defined..that way one is not forced to use a particular cliche just to fit it in somewhere..
Barbara Writes
14 years ago
Thanks A
i got here late and was rushing to catch up. leave to me to catch up then run a head. lol
no one has to rewrite their poem to include my three. all is good just the way it is.
don't let me change a thing, i tend to do that unawares
"being mentally challenged is very challenging"
lou
14 years ago
Anna
Good job
Lou
Kailashana2
14 years ago
A woman of few words rarely
A woman of few words rarely if ever, uses a cliche.
~A
Barbara Writes
14 years ago
Anna
nice flow. if sings of cliches nicely done
Race_9togo
14 years ago
Not bad
But not good either. I don't feel any of the evocation and wonder I usually find in your poetry, Anna.
Having said that though, you didn't do bad with what we had to write with.
Kailashana2
14 years ago
So is that a bad or a good
So is that a bad or a good thing? lol.
I didn't hit the ball out of the park? But did you follow the bounce? ;-)
~
lou
14 years ago
Anna
Here's a few more words LOL !!! Very clever use of the words provided, I think we all made the best of a very difficult task.
Hey here's a cliche as regards my short critique, 'Less is more,' and a new cliche, ' Why use a thousand words where one will do' LMAO !!!
Lou
Eduardo Cruz
14 years ago
Anna
I am having another senior moment, there starting to happen too offen. LMFAO!!
this shit kicked my arse, and here you are doind it just fine so again I win in the department of brain freeze's
Eddie