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Feb 25, 2018
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This poem is part of the workshop:
Sunku: beyond rhyme and rhythm, search for new structures in short form
Parties & parties ( Sunku Workshop )
Fireworks
Chocolate cakes
Party is on
Bullets
Guns and missles
Party is on
More blood
Death toll's up
Party is on
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Sorry if I'm becoming more pessimistic. Crimes against the humanity in Syria is beyond what anyone would imagine
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
raj
7 years 4 months ago
Hi Rula
A good Sunku which is in the context of the present scenario in our world.....no matter what's morally right or wrong...there are winners and loser in the game of life ,,,and life goes on...
Rula
7 years 4 months ago
dear Raj
V. much appreciate the read and your kind words.
lonlyhrtsclub13
7 years 4 months ago
Hi Rula
Such an accurate depiction of what is going on in the world today. You could try eliminating THE and just say party's on. Otherwise, great Sunku
Rula
7 years 4 months ago
Thank you Thadear Carrie
For your time. Edits done. Appreciate it.
lovedly
7 years 4 months ago
when in each para you say ''party is on
coming from you Rula
would be like a paucity
of syllables form
Can I request you to your SUNKU reform
Iriz has take us all up
like a storm
Rula
7 years 4 months ago
Hello loved
Thank you sir for the visit. Hope it flows better now.
Appreciate it.
IRiz
7 years 4 months ago
Well done
Well done
I love your angry message
It is not only about current events.
To me your sunku is
about how life finds a way to ignore pain when it is not a direct hit and
how inactivity and ignorance makes it worse
Rula
7 years 4 months ago
You're spot on
dear. You've read between the lines which few can do.
So grateful for your consistant effort, you have fulfilled all that a workshop might need.
Highly appreciate it dear.
weirdelf
7 years 4 months ago
pleasing, but not Sunku
https://vocaroo.com/i/s0QLHJdirAUG
Rula
7 years 4 months ago
Hello jess
Thanks for honoring me with your read.
I wonder what makes you think that it's not a sunku though.
Thank you.