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raj
Feb 13, 2018 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)
This poem is part of the workshop:

Sunku: beyond rhyme and rhythm, search for new structures in short form

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Tick talks [Sunku Workshop]

Tick talks
of father time
is menacing

Intrudes
silence of
my solitude

Wrecking
wakeful sleep
like a witch hunt

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Somewhere in the world, IND

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Comments

IRiz

IRiz

7 years 4 months ago

Very good! Honest words. Real

Very good! Honest words. Real feelings.
The poem I love. It looks like a second take of the same theme that was in the Sunku with moon.
This one has your words, it is more unique.
It is better.

R

raj

7 years 4 months ago

Thanks IRiz for the read and

Thanks IRiz for the read and your encouraging comment. Feels good to know I am improving..

Regards..