hugo la rosa

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The Pains They Thought for the Broken Earth

Posted Mar 10, 2010 · 53 lines · 21 critiques

I walk across

the sunny patio again:

The gnarled edgings have

given dandelions

and thistles. There is

no sign of a lawn

but a look alike

crumpled carpet, green

beneath the swings where

the winter past

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has been singing

its tingling, chilly melodies.

The painting rollers,

the broken bricks,

the wheelbarrow

remaining;

the climbing little vineyard

dry and forgotten

beyond any obligation,

free of any duties.

The lonely driveway,

ravaged by the purity

of salt, burning it,

underneath the steps.

The glory of Spring

is here, once more,

even though accosted

by a loveless sadness;

even when the fence

has given way

and fallen,

together with some

of the lanterns.

But those against the trellis

still remain, who

knows for what the use.

You see, such were the storms

that cleaved

unto the many days

in the history of the houses,

and the deserted,

clean streets of Ozone Park.

In the end. . .

God only knows

what imagined pains

they thought for the broken

ages of the earth

that so inadvertently came.

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on The Pains They Thought for the Broken Earth from @lyz
"and you take heed, I also want to see more like this gracing the pages. Love to all. XX"
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on The Pains They Thought for the Broken Earth from @Nordic cloud
"Maybe not shorter poems, this one, you know Hugo could be compacted a little as it is a kind of series of visions of a Spring garden after the Winter, and the lines could be a little longer making the whole slightly mor…"
15 Mon

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on The Pains They Thought for the Broken Earth from @loved
"your poem has earned more five stars than i shall in a life time you poetry is marvellous but theres only a small suggestion only perhaps if you could curtail a bit and hack of/off a tail somehow many more stars shall c…"
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on The Pains They Thought for the Broken Earth from @lyz
"I could see through your eyes. Powerful yet gentle. Loved it Hugo. Well worded. Love to you and yours. Lyz. XX"
12 Fri

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"Sshh!," by @lyz
"You are out to play with words and content, as I figure from your poem ever so playful. I like the shadow puppets seen through a window curtain, or is it shades? Sshh! is really an apt title for the magical onlookers, f…"
11 Thu

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on The Pains They Thought for the Broken Earth from @xena465
"Hi Hugo. It's been a while since you posted a poem, and what a lovely poem...I like the mention of The Thistle. `The emblem of my Native Country Scotland`. And Lyz is still here and has posted a really nice poem. 5 star…"
11 Thu

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"My Uncle Vinny" by @xena465
"Your poem reminds me of the movie "Powder", where somebody kills a deer for simple, evil pleasure. The fact that your poem is liked or not doesn't make it bad. It's really special, and I agree with the contents and the…"
11 Thu

Received a critique
on The Pains They Thought for the Broken Earth from @Candlewitch
"Yes, Spring is nearing again. The fence needs fixing and the porch needs painting. We have had temps in the forties and fifties this week with buckets of rain everyday. Only a few small patches of snow remain. Always, C…"
11 Thu

Received a critique
on The Pains They Thought for the Broken Earth from @seabhac
"Nice to see you writing again. This sounds like my garden at the moment after the deluge of a long winter and a new pup...I used to have a lovely lawn and a fence that wasn't broken and now....well God only knows but I…"
11 Thu

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"shiver the night " by @Seren
"The music of the ears and the music of the soul, sound and meaning mingle perfectly in this poem of yours. You didn't become a violinist or a cellist, but you became one of the best poets I know, including Kailashana. I…"
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on The Pains They Thought for the Broken Earth from @Seren
"Hugo the power of your words as always has punch ... wonderful poem sorry to be late getting to this one love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x"
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"40….. Love" by @seabhac
"I simply love the poem! It's really something extraordinary. I like the symbolism, and the pacing, the meaning and the words. Sincerely, Hugo"
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"No Mail Today 342 views wow" by @loved
"The way you write and express your sentiments tells me you are a woman, and young and pretty. Excellent poem you have here, and I believe is deserving of a nice comment, and some stars. Great work, Sincerely, Hugo"
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"Really sad. Shocking truths, unexplainable to many, but what goes inside the human mind is a puzzle so cryptic and vague, it's really difficult to pronounce any kind of judgment. Great poem! Sincerely, Hugo"
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"Pretty little poem, you've written a gem accented with a great and cute philosophical bent, one of a kind. Nice! Sincerely, Hugo"
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"Frightful and creepy, but nonetheless great poetic rendition of the life of demons and their unaware feeders. Nice work! Sincerely, Hugo"
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