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Shadow_whispers
Member since October 27, 2007
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Take My Hand
The computer screen flickers as he blinks away tears,
he swallows a lump, attempting to suffocate his fears.
He can’t get passed them as visions flash in his mind,
succeeding in keeping him bound and confined.
Silently he screams, writhing in pain,
it’s a constant battle just to stay sane.
He claws and rips, trying to escape.
he can’t get away from this demonic rape.
Someone walks in and he smiles a greeting,
they are completely blind to his inner pleading.
With his mask in place, his costume appears,
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carefully hiding his invisible tears.
Nobody can save him, this hell is his doom;
He concedes to this fate, again alone in his room.
But you can be saved, just reach out your hand;
I won’t push you away, please understand.
I love you so much, and if you let me I’ll help.
I can’t claim to know all the pain that you’ve felt.
But I promise not to be blind to the tears that you’ve bled,
and, if I can, I’ll hold you as you cry on your bed.
I’ll wipe away your tears and comfort your woes;
I’ll never shatter this Crystal rose.
So take my hand, and end this fight.
It’s senseless to battle with all of your might.
Let me in and I’ll always be your friend,
I’ll love you forever, till the very end.
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- July 2008
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18 FriReceived a critique
on Take My Hand from @tbeaudet
"So nice to see you back and still writing great stuff. This is a beautiful plea to a friend to accept the gift of friendship, to let down their guard. Loved it...Glad you're back! (don't even try to 'center your work) i…" -
06 SunCritiqued
"A Muse's Delusions" by @Calliope
"This is a great poem. It sounds like a place I would like to stay. You made it sound like dark fairytale land. Very beautiful." -
06 SunCritiqued
"A Dark Trio" by @Calliope
""Why must they weigh your heart against a feather? Couldn’t they find something heavier?" I love the whole poem but that was my favorite part. The whole poem is very dark and I love it. Thanks. Shade" -
06 Sun
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06 SunCritiqued
"Addicted" by @Calliope
"Ohhh, I know how that is and you explain it beautifully. It's wonderful and dangerous at the same time. I love the way you described it as beautiful poison. Very nicely done." -
04 FriReceived a critique
on Nameless Blue Eyes from @Calliope
"but find both extremely tragic,You've written this peice with such emotion it is clearly a very real experience and I admit to getting a bit teary-eyed myself.Brava! Where power corrupts,poetry cleanses." -
04 FriReceived a critique
on Take My Hand from @Calliope
"is absolutely breathtaking,So very heartfelt, needing to be let in ,needing to be the protector,the sheild from their pain...[sighs]beautiful... Where power corrupts,poetry cleanses." -
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03 ThuCritiqued
"Daddy, please don't go.." by @Secrets and Memories
"It hurts to lose someone close to you and very easy to get angry at the person for your feelings of abandonment. But it's a very well written poem. I know the poem I write to my father didn't turn out nearly this well…" -
03 ThuCritiqued
"Alone For Too Long" by @Secrets and Memories
"Thank you for your comment on my poem. I'll post more. But as to your poem, I think that describes the way alot of people feel. I think it was beautifully written. It actually flowed pretty well for me. I look forward t…" - June 2008
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25 WedReceived a critique
on Nameless Blue Eyes from @Secrets and Memories
"A very well done poem indeed. Such reality was felt as if it was happening at that very given moment. So full of joy and happiness, yet so full of sorrow and darkness as well. Very touching indeed. Do hope to read more…" - November 2007
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03 SatReceived a critique
on Nameless Blue Eyes from @tbeaudet
"in fact, I have 2 Golden Retrievers, but 1 puppy out of a litter not surviving is not as tragic as an infant dying." -
02 FriReceived a critique
on Nameless Blue Eyes from @tbeaudet
"Knowing the details really helps me with this one.....I honestly thought this was about an infant, and it was upsetting to me. Thanks for the explanation." -
01 ThuReceived a critique
on Nameless Blue Eyes from @dbrock
"Well, I'm a "softie" and it made me well with tears. Enjoyed the read! dbrock/donna" -
01 ThuReceived a critique
on Nameless Blue Eyes from @dbrock
"Well, I'm a "softie" and it made me well up with tears! Enjoyed the read, dbrock/donna" -
01 ThuCritiqued
"It Was Me" by @tbeaudet
"Ah... I see... It was a very good poem. And again, I'm sorry for your loss." - October 2007
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31 WedCritiqued
"It Was Me" by @tbeaudet
"See?! I knew it. I loved this! That was so sweet. I actually read your comment about it being for that Mother before I read the poem so it made me shed a tear or too. That was beautiful! It touched my heart. This is won…" -
30 TueFirst publication
Nameless Blue Eyes
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30 Tue
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28 SunFirst critique offered
on "A Very Strong Wind" by @tbeaudet
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26 FriJoined Neopoet
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First poem published 4 days later.
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