sha_onarainyday

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To Die,To Lose

Posted May 26, 2010 · 25 lines · 1 critiques

I think I understand

the great defeat-

A moment staring blankly

at the sky.

A rattle from the lungs

and to the cheek.

The bones so stiff

but light like lullabies.

Oh, but the synapses fire still.

Remember the lines we drew

as children in the sand?

And the bridges we crossed

over mud that made our feet like clay?

I think I understand-

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That lost in all the years

is black and white

so we live in shades that swirl

between the two-

A familiar and ungodly, troubled hue.

To be a bitter soul and live in doubt

To wipe away, not winnow,

all this sand.

I breath my last and

then become the land.

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February 2024
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15 years of membership
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10 years of membership
February 2014
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5 years of membership
May 2010
27 Thu

Received a critique
on To Die,To Lose from @xena465
"I love the flow. Very nice write. Rosina xena465"
26 Wed

Posted a poem
To Die,To Lose
"I think I understand"
Open thread 25 lines
11 Tue

Critiqued
"ASPARAGUS VEINS" by @cj foster
"I like the odd way you describe this strange person. bravo, sha"
09 Sun

Received a critique
on The Fatalist from @Grassfield
"I'm impressed! A wonderful write that I will have to read several more times!"
09 Sun

Posted a poem
The Fatalist
"I say-"
Open thread 32 lines
April 2010
28 Wed

Received a critique
on This and When from @Candlewitch
"A mystical piece. Very well thought out with great imagery. my favorite lines: The new will become old and new again, And it is Love who knew it in the end. Always, Cat"
26 Mon

Posted a poem
This and When
"Take this and when you get there"
Open thread 26 lines
14 Wed

Received a critique
on Bipartisan from @ziggy
"hi good to read someone new to me at least , the title drew me in ,, where you say " yes now the rose (color) wee typo maybe ,,zigs"
March 2010
28 Sun

Received a critique
on Bipartisan from @Breakinglogic
"Surreal. Loved it :) a bit thought provoking, I read it several times. Peace and cheers, logic"
27 Sat

Posted a poem
Bipartisan
"You've been wearing 3D glasses"
Open thread 32 lines
February 2010
28 Sun

Anniversary
One year of membership
27 Sat

Received a critique
on Working In Winter from @whitetea
"You can never go wrong with tea or coffee. ;)"
26 Fri

Received a critique
on So Long My Darlings from @Stuart Reiss
"No past lovers nor ashen particles left of unsuccessful thought shall keep me from new shores. Hi Sha.. really liked this one and the lines below really stood out for me I shall learn to write my name in water so any go…"
24 Wed

Received a critique
on So Long My Darlings from @bjp
"This is a draft of a potentially superb poem. Olya and I have been discussing it. We, of course, remain unsure to whom goodbye is being said: perhaps children; perhaps old loves ("the supplications for your faults" and…"
23 Tue

Critiqued
"Worry Follow Me" by @Spectrum
"I really like your first and last stanzas, they have an excellent flow, but somewhere in the middle I got lost in the dog and stick metaphor. I think that the 4th stanza could be cut easily. I think the beginning and en…"
23 Tue

Posted a poem
So Long My Darlings
"So long my darlings."
Open thread 34 lines
23 Tue

Critiqued
"DEEP DARK DOWN " by @Nordic cloud
"I love the imagery here. The morning sun accompanied by a new smile, the buzzard sweeping across the plain. This poem makes me think how deeply are our moods connected with our surrounds? with the weather or time of day…"
17 Wed

Critiqued
"We are the young" by @doorman
"I like this. It's a nice clash between the past and the present."
January 2010
07 Thu

Posted a poem
Working In Winter
"The cold hits stiff."
Open thread 24 lines
December 2009
28 Mon

Critiqued
"Deleted" by @anonymous1
"This really made me smile. i like the "G", makes the poem stand out. bravo, sha"
25 Fri

Critiqued
"Of Quests and Hopes and Hummingbirds" by @Pugilist
"Sorta like Dante being led by Virgil. I enjoyed the journey. The rhyme scheme works well, giving the piece an ethereal quality. The imagery is effective. i appreciate how the story comes back full circle, for as they sa…"
25 Fri

Critiqued
"Cardboard Princess" by @orgami
"Orgami- Very moving piece. I feel you've really pinpointed something intangible and sad about being a woman. Something once hopeful, now lost. Something a woman loses with age. This is my favorite stanza: she keeps the…"
23 Wed

Critiqued
"These Hands" by @johnnyk_11
"I suppose we all make out own little empires from scratch. Life is a hands on experience after all. Bravo, sha"
21 Mon

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Peaceful Emma
"One day I came"
Open thread 47 lines
August 2009
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A Photoshopped Picture
"In the pretending"
Open thread 40 lines
24 Mon

Posted a poem
Nothing's as hard...
"If you can remember the"
Open thread 53 lines
July 2009
22 Wed

Posted a poem
The Good Wife
"It used to be"
Open thread 60 lines
June 2009
14 Sun

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Summer Blues
"Perfect"
Open thread 16 lines
06 Sat

Posted a poem
Not All
"It's not all it's cracked up to be"
Open thread 26 lines
April 2009
15 Wed

Highest posting month
April 2009 — 5 poems
March 2009
01 Sun

First critique offered
on "How are you?" by @tarcus
01 Sun

First publication
Forms of "to be" in poetry
February 2009
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Joined Neopoet
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15 years of membership

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on To Die,To Lose from @xena465

"ASPARAGUS VEINS" by @cj foster

on The Fatalist from @Grassfield

on This and When from @Candlewitch

on Bipartisan from @ziggy

on Bipartisan from @Breakinglogic

One year of membership

on Working In Winter from @whitetea

on So Long My Darlings from @Stuart Reiss

on So Long My Darlings from @bjp

"Worry Follow Me" by @Spectrum

"DEEP DARK DOWN " by @Nordic cloud

"We are the young" by @doorman

"Deleted" by @anonymous1

"Of Quests and Hopes and Hummingbirds" by @Pugilist

"Cardboard Princess" by @orgami

"These Hands" by @johnnyk_11

April 2009 — 5 poems

on "How are you?" by @tarcus

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