Aureo

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Daylight

Posted Mar 25, 2009 · 53 lines · 7 critiques

Today I chose to run with the sun

To gently lay down the burden

That I carry but do not repent

All the grace that has been lent

To one who tried to conquer all

Who rose once only to fall

To her own limited concept

Of knowledge as only precept

Glistening sun on melting snow

The light of day doth glow

Reminder of the time left

Not to leave this life bereft

Of the music of the spheres

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Twinkling sound that endears

Remembrance of our sparkling birth

Before we were committed to the earth

For every dream that never came

I acknowledge being part of a game

Where light strikes the darker part

In the skirmish one must demark

A thin line that divides dusk from dawn

The razors edge, a path is drawn

Tiny ballerina feet touch lightly now

So as not to defeat this moment’s vow

A promise left unfulfilled

By seeking lesser thrills

To survive this last night

To be returned to the light

Destiny caressed by fate

Light speed before it’s too late

Perfect seed in which is contained

The answers must be maintained

For in the past I awoke

Struck by lightening broke

The fragments of my being

Shattered images fleeting

Glimpses of the far and near

Congruent to what we fear

To be nothing and accept all

Remains for us a distant call

Standing present and still inside

Watching as our worlds collide

Light and dark starkly juxtaposed

What lies in wait still undisclosed

Will our future be less or great

We stand at the universe’s gate

Resolved and evolved decisions

Dawn this day of precious visions

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April 2010
10 Sat

Received a critique
on Daylight from @yenti
"A lovely long piece and to have Jonathan go through it with such a knowledge of poetry is great...I know it seems that he takes a poem and tears it apart but in doing so we all learn such a lot about the way poetry can…"
May 2009
17 Sun

Received a critique
on Daylight from @Cloudthings
"I totally agree & as I said I value your input here & everywhere else greatly, I learn a great deal & hope you continue to put it forth... But my own opinion on this is that personally I love it without the confines of…"
17 Sun

Received a critique
on Daylight from @Pugilist
"Seriously, no one has a lock on what is right in poetry and all we can do is try to give each other advice and support. --Jonathan Annoying the world, one person at a time (Group discounts available)"
17 Sun

Received a critique
on Daylight from @Cloudthings
"PS I must say, I loved Jonathons points & learned much from them, but I still love this work the way it is. xx~ Anni ~~~ "A loving person lives in a loving world. A hostile person lives in a hostile world; everyone you…"
17 Sun

Received a critique
on Daylight from @Cloudthings
"Hi Kristeta, well, I am far too much of an improviser & a passion monger to be too concerned if the meter changes too much as long as the progression makes sense to the feel of the write I feel it "works" & this, my dea…"
April 2009
11 Sat

Received a critique
on Daylight from @Ink Dragon
"You have some wonderful imagery here, and really great word choices. However, I agree a little with Jonathan that you could do something to make it flow smoother. You know, just add or cut out a syllable or two in some…"
06 Mon

Received a critique
on Daylight from @Pugilist
"Kristeta, Although you listed this as a free-form poem, it has all the hallmarks of a classic ballad/ode in the stanza format and rhyme scheme. The problem I am having is that the meter wanders, sometimes significantly…"
March 2009
26 Thu

Critiqued
"Leaves the whole truth half unspoken" by @Cloudthings
"Hi Anni, I didn't want to submit this poem because of the anger it expressed. I guess after reading your poem to a friend I took courage to let someone else see it. Sometimes we just have to be ruthless when we fight to…"
26 Thu

Critiqued
"That winter" by @Ink Dragon
"Dear Nina, May I call you Nina, friend, thank you for pointing me in your direction. Amazing little bit of synchronicity that we both chose ice skating as a metaphor for a relationship. Unfortunately not too many are wi…"
26 Thu

Critiqued
"deleted" by @Ink Dragon
"Dear Ink Dragon (Nina), Thank you for your approach to the subject of Lucifer, I have written much about my demons and those of others, but alas I know that they all hark from one. So as "the son of dawn" fell did we no…"
25 Wed

Received a critique
on Good Night My Love from @Nordic cloud
"And makes all other praises trite I bow my head in admiration of both your poem and Anni's comment. Ann"
25 Wed

Posted a poem
Daylight
"Today I chose to run with the sun"
Open thread 53 lines
25 Wed

Critiqued
"Strange Thoughts" by @Nordic cloud
"Hello Ann, Thank you for this lovely thought provoking piece. How many times have I asked and contemplated the age old question "nothing matters or does everything matter?" It seems we just go around in circles, a begin…"
24 Tue

Posted a poem
The Ice Skater
"Words flow smoothly"
Open thread 47 lines
17 Tue

Posted a poem
I See
"I see"
Open thread 45 lines
February 2009
18 Wed

Critiqued
"Cosmic Ballet" by @IntrinsicDream
"Dear Jay, I keep finding more poets whose words transport us to our connection with the Cosmic Ballet. Thank you for sharing it. I agree with Richard in that you can tighten this one up a bit. I write in a very similar…"
18 Wed

Critiqued
"Creation" by @Jo Latimer
"Hi Jo, It may be new but it captures beautifully that instant when we perceive our perfection, ah, if we could only pare away all the debris and decay and live in that infinity. There is a great depth here in your words…"
18 Wed

Posted a poem
An Afternoon Reverie
"In a state of reverie"
Open thread 25 lines
17 Tue

Posted a poem
Good Night My Love
"I long to call and say good night my love"
Open thread 36 lines
15 Sun

Posted a poem
The Sword
"Forged in Cosmic Light"
Open thread 42 lines
15 Sun

Highest posting month
February 2009 — 11 poems
13 Fri

Posted a poem
Small Seed
"So small now this seed"
Open thread 3 lines
13 Fri

Critiqued
"I Remain" by @Stella
"So here I am reading your poetry, oh how strong is this longing to remain an innocent child, full of wonder and possibility. What we face and I think it matters not the age, is our own self knowledge of who we are, wher…"
12 Thu

Posted a poem
Shackles
"I wonder about you my friend"
Open thread 41 lines
11 Wed

Critiqued
"There Is A World Beyond Our Own" by @Lonnie
"A poem that lingers, drawing me into the world beyond our own. Some poems seem to just flow from this world beyond our own and we are but their vehicle, this one feels this way to me. Thank you."
11 Wed

Posted a poem
Feeble Light
"I clung to your body last night"
Open thread 31 lines
08 Sun

First critique offered
on "Confusion in the A.M." by @Proprietress of Crimson Hearts
08 Sun

Posted a poem
Words
"One wishes that words"
Open thread 17 lines
07 Sat

Posted a poem
Puddle of Complacency
"A man falls to his own complacency"
Open thread 39 lines
05 Thu

Posted a poem
Evolution
"I walked by the river tonight"
Open thread 43 lines
January 2009
31 Sat

First publication
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"Leaves the whole truth half unspoken" by @Cloudthings

"That winter" by @Ink Dragon

"deleted" by @Ink Dragon

on Good Night My Love from @Nordic cloud

"Strange Thoughts" by @Nordic cloud

"Cosmic Ballet" by @IntrinsicDream

"Creation" by @Jo Latimer

February 2009 — 11 poems

"I Remain" by @Stella

"There Is A World Beyond Our Own" by @Lonnie

on "Confusion in the A.M." by @Proprietress of Crimson Hearts

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