Lunegirl

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Daemon King

Posted Apr 1, 2010 · 39 lines · 2 critiques

They tell me that love don't come knocking for the strange
they tell me faded hope is the insignificance of the deranged
well won't you come sit by my side
spend sometime with a mad lost girl
I'll liven up your boring life with my sad story on a loop i tell
they tell me that love don't come knocking for the strange
they tell me faded hope is the insignificance of the deranged

She saw me staring right through your heart
holding my breath till your apart
gripping a thing called no reality
sinking my fingers into metaphorical skin
holding to tight
unstitching your seems
undoing your mind

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blind smiles and to full words
seeping into the cracks
further tearing your solidarity.

I see in him my head
i feel him in my skin
remnants of yesterday
bottled up within
the curse that wont be crucified
the sin that wont be cast aside

I'm all cut up
I'm all undone
layer over layer
of echoes ghost love
twineing through the silence
darkly shining through the sun
Your marbled through my veins
painted round my soul
permenting frozen lungs
your my daemon king

I see in him my head
i feel him in my skin
remnants of yesterday
bottled up within
the curse that wont be crucified
the sin that wont be cast aside

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First poem published 1 days later.
July 2010
07 Wed

Critiqued
"Then Came The Night" by @Candlewitch
"Brilliant read to come back to my friend!! beautiful poem indeed. vicki Optimism in adversity nutures positive outcomes"
April 2010
13 Tue

Received a critique
on Lucifer and Gabriel from @Dalton
"this one reads like a chant. beautifully read aloud. i love the lore of angels. you have painted a beautiful picture for us all. love John X"
13 Tue

Received a critique
on Hurricane from @Dalton
"the second stanza better than the first. it flowed very well. a pleasure to read. your best so far. John X"
07 Wed

Received a critique
on lolita from @sutton
"you really did cause quit the stir, any how take it from me from your average non reading person of the world, it's great, seems to me if these people read your poem enough times they could blame you for the murder of J…"
07 Wed

Received a critique
on lolita from @sutton
"just write, it think this was amazing, nothing always has to have an excepted ending, indecision in writes is what makes them great, this is not the news. great write,"
01 Thu

Received a critique
on Daemon King from @panaella
"Hello, Last stanza the best... I remember you from a while ago...good to see you back. Had a break myself. Ells x"
01 Thu

Received a critique
on Daemon King from @Roscoe Lane
"Loved it, and i think i understand your feelings now put down in verse. Regards Roscoe.."
01 Thu

Posted a poem
Daemon King
"They tell me that love don't come knocking for the strange"
Open thread 39 lines
March 2010
13 Sat

Received a critique
on Prozac from @magics02
"I thought I would ask why?? Curious you know the one that writes of the same comment on everyones pages? Quite absurd to say the least. Madame please take the call. LOL Love Magics Learn to live, learn to forgive. Life…"
13 Sat

Received a critique
on Prozac from @magics02
"Good Morning Madam How this write was amazing to me and how I can relate to it. You know I can start writing along these very same lines as too of my life and my son's father but boy it would be something else, a whole…"
10 Wed

Critiqued
"Sparrow's Spell" by @Candlewitch
"Love it Cat, How true! Magpies and vultures! succinct. love vix Optimism in adversity nutures positive outcomes"
10 Wed

Posted a poem
Prozac
"Romeo romeo, where art thou fucking romeo?"
Open thread 30 lines
06 Sat

Critiqued
"Value decline in nearness." by @R.M.Shanmugam
"So very true for many! great little piece for a thought of the day vix Optimism in adversity nutures positive outcomes"
06 Sat

Critiqued
"Pet Cemetery" by @xena465
"Rosina, you have great word useage lol!! limitations indeed! but if you do get stuck on line theasaurus! Optimism in adversity nutures positive outcomes"
06 Sat

Critiqued
"Unearthly Encounter" by @xena465
"Thanks Rosina, as i said the pleasure has all been mine, dont feel you have to write strait away if i mass comment again lol, sometimes i dont have time to read any work then i get a heap of it to catch up. have loved d…"
06 Sat

Posted a poem
Other me
"Other Me."
Open thread 22 lines
06 Sat

Critiqued
"Sheep (a rant)" by @Race_9togo
"Wow dunkin doughnuts had a nut that day, i had a small chuckle at the thought of dunking doughnuts being the location of this happening to inspire this piece. My mother had an experience like this at the bus stop quite…"
06 Sat

Critiqued
"Matrimonial Duties" by @xena465
"I have a good friend who says you never know what is around the corner. I so believe that now. im so pleasse neo is helping you. I think you are brave for being open about how you feel and have courage, if you can do th…"
06 Sat

Critiqued
"Little Puppy" by @xena465
"Its has been my pleasure, Ive read a good few now and they are all very good! well done a pleasure to spend my layin reading your work : ) Optimism in adversity nutures positive outcomes"
05 Fri

Posted a poem
Hurricane
"Green pine trees breath a shush that,"
Open thread 22 lines
03 Wed

Posted a poem
Another episode
"Its not dense heavy cuboid blocks"
Open thread 23 lines
03 Wed

Posted a poem
In finding you i lost myself
"you smile gold plated words"
Open thread 21 lines
February 2010
27 Sat

Posted a poem
Unbound.
"What would my fingers flow thoust i let them free?,  free to run wild with ink and image.....how would the reader taste my skin of thought?"
Open thread 8 lines
26 Fri

Posted a poem
Inamorata (revised)
"I burn his calm like no other can,"
Open thread 31 lines
22 Mon

Posted a poem
Granma
"shes all peppermint creams and anti aging serum,"
Open thread 16 lines
17 Wed

Posted a poem
unfinished work in progess
"sly slit moon winks lust"
Open thread 5 lines
17 Wed

Posted a poem
The scarlet swimming costume
"A transformation"
Open thread 20 lines
16 Tue

Posted a poem
wellies
"cough splutter laugh mutter"
Open thread 21 lines
January 2010
15 Fri

Highest posting month
January 2010 — 22 poems
06 Wed

Most-discussed work
Mind bruised by thoughtful fists. part four

36 critiques to date.
December 2009
01 Tue

First publication
Shallow is the man
01 Tue

First critique offered
on "Who Is The Alien?" by @L.M. Troch

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"Then Came The Night" by @Candlewitch

on Lucifer and Gabriel from @Dalton

on Hurricane from @Dalton

on lolita from @sutton

on lolita from @sutton

on Daemon King from @panaella

on Daemon King from @Roscoe Lane

on Prozac from @magics02

on Prozac from @magics02

"Sparrow's Spell" by @Candlewitch

"Value decline in nearness." by @R.M.Shanmugam

"Pet Cemetery" by @xena465

"Unearthly Encounter" by @xena465

"Sheep (a rant)" by @Race_9togo

"Matrimonial Duties" by @xena465

"Little Puppy" by @xena465

January 2010 — 22 poems

on "Who Is The Alien?" by @L.M. Troch

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